雅思大作文解析:教育罪犯有效的方式

据说很多犯罪分子教育程度很低。有观点称减少犯罪的办法是在监狱中教育他们，帮助他们出狱找工作。同意反对？

这是一道观点类大作文，讨论的如何减少犯罪的问题，题目中提出的观点是：针对犯罪分子教育程度低，是在监狱中提供教育帮助他们出狱后找工作。审题时要注意的是题目中给出了词“the best way”，一般遇到词，我们都可以从反对角度切入会更好写（如果同意的话，我们得论证这个办法确实比别的更加有效，难度会很高）。

而在反驳题目逻辑时，可以采取2种思路，一是推翻对方结论的前提——即对方对犯罪原因的分析有误，进而分析出其他可能的原因，并给出相应的办法；二是推翻对方的办法——即对方的办法有问题，所以不可行，进而给出更好的办法。

针对给教育程度不高的罪犯，在监狱中提供教育的机会来帮助他们出狱后找到工作，确实是一个有效的办法。因为很多时候他们犯罪就是因为缺乏谋生手段，进而为了生计进行犯罪。如果只是单纯刑满释放，出狱后他们依然缺乏合法的谋生手段，很有可能会进行二次犯罪。而通过提高他们的教育水平，教授他们手艺和技能，使得他们出狱后有了更好更安全的赚钱方式的话，自然也就减少了犯罪的可能性。

但是这个方式不能称之为方式，因为它仅仅解决了部分问题，而引发犯罪的原因本身是个复杂的问题，有各方面因素考量，包括外部环境和当事人自身原因，针对不同情况有效的办法也不一样。

首先这个方法并没有办法有效减少“犯罪的”数量，它是在人们进行了一次犯罪进到了监狱后才采取的一种手段。其次，有一些犯罪和教育程度并无关系或是犯罪分子本身具备高学历，比如暴力犯罪、模仿犯罪或是经济犯罪等，针对这些情况，这个手段用处也不并不大。

而针对这些犯罪手段，可能会需要更多的普法宣传、严厉打击犯罪行为来威慑潜在犯罪分子，培养犯罪分子的社会责任心而非教育水平，或是营造更健康和良好的社会环境等手段。

While it is assumed that the key solution to curb crimes is to educate prisoners about working skills, I do not think that it is rational to attribute pervasive criminality solely to illiteracy and therefore regard vocational training as the panacea to constrain the trend.

Indeed, it is easy to understand why this opinion in question is favored by some people. From their perspective, the major reason leading to illegal activities is the lack of schooling: it is true that many offenders embark on the path of crimes (e.g. theft, robbery) because they do not possess the needed degrees or basic skills to find a job; unfortunately, pure imprisonment does little to change their lives after releasing. In this sense, to train them basic vocational skills in prison seems to be a fundamental solution to prevent them from committing the same crimes after release.

However, it is not justified enough to recognize education as the key method to constrain the criminal activities. It is oversimple to attribute crimes exclusively to lack of education. Rather, the worrying trend is a complicated problem which is caused by various culprits; for example, the detrimental impact of media that makes young people aggressive and violent, and the many financial frauds are committed mainly by those with professional backgrounds. In response to these problems, multiple measures are needed instead of solely relying on vocational training. As an alternative, the government can institute laws against violence and obscene contents on TV and computer games, mitigating the possibility of young minds being exposed to offensive contents and therefore translating the plots in the virtual world into reality. As well as the media censorship, social service can play a part in cultivating a sense of social responsibility among those criminals with higher education. Both practices seem to have equally effective influence on crimes as educating prisoners.

In conclusion, it looks simplistic to assume improved education as the best way to limit crimes, whereas other options might be equally effective in tackling the problem.

panacea  灵丹妙药

curb  遏制

mi*ehavior  不良行为

fundamental  根本的

institute  提出

obscene  不良的

media censorship  媒体监管

Fraud  诈骗