2021年9月7日雅思写作复习资料分析

9月7日的雅思写作小作文考题是地图题，但只是近似于地图题的考题，比较奇怪。而大作文考的是核能是帮助可持续发展的佳能源，你是否同意？下面来看下上海的邹燕萍老师如何考虑这两题。本次考的其他部分复习资料评析请关注：
一 雅思写作 小作文部分

图例：

提示 ：
先分析题目，类似于地图题。有两张，介绍了美和日本办公室的相关格局。之所以只能说类似于地图题，是因为过往的经验告知大，地图类一般考的多的都是城镇变迁这个类别。这次考的图型不是流程图，近似于地图。但不是体现时间变化的地图，而是类似于两个地方同一个时间点的格局比较。没有明显时间标志词的时候，时态上可以选择一般现在时。

写作方法上，原则上一个图形写一段。然后是读题，小作文忌讳主观评论，更需要的是客观描述图形。比如本次考，可以先看个日本办公室，总体是按照部门从上到下来落座；而美的办公室更多按照功能来划分，从左到右来落座，分成功能房，员工区，管理区。不建议学生过多的添加主观评论，比如日本人是一个压迫式的格局，美是一个平等的格局等等。措辞需要客观。

框架提示：
开头段
The two diagrams illustrate the structure in a typical Japanese office compared with that in an American office.

中间段
A careful *ysis of the first diagram makes it clear that seats are generally arranged based on one’s title. Specifically, it is the general manager who holds the central as well as top position in the office. As to other employees, they are divided, horizontally, into different groups. Within each section, the white-collar workers are seated on either side of the table, with their section manager sitting in the front.

中间二段
Different from what is organized in Japanese offices, the American tend to utilize the space by function. The office is separated, from left to right, into three parts. On the left side, there are four rooms for copying, storage as well as conference. Adjacent to these four rooms are a number of independent studios for employees who are seated in the middle of the office. On the right side are several rooms for section managers and the general manager. Most notably, the seat for the general manager is located in the lowest right corner, contrary to the top middle position for the manager in Japan.

结尾段
In summary, clear from these two pictures is the specific organization of a typical Japanese office versus that of an American. It is noticeable that the Japanese tend to arrange the space according to one’s position while the American prefer a function-based office.

二 雅思 大作文部分

题目： Nuclear energy is the best source of power in meeting ever-increasing energy needs，To what extent do you agree or disagree?

提示 ：分析文章关键词是“nuclear energy”,题目类型是观点类别的，所以需要考生开头段提出自己明确的观点。笔者在观点类别的教学中，建议考生开头段提出观点之后，中间至少两个分论点来支撑自己的总观点。如果有条件可以进行中间三段即让步反驳段的写作。结尾段需要重申观点，条件允许提出解决行的建议。

思路 ：笔者上课讲授过五大思考问题的基本原则，比如金钱，身心健康，文化，效率和环境原则。

金钱原则：核能的生产成本相对较低(Low operating costs relatively)

身心健康原则：

1. 核辐射，核泄漏危害健康(be exposed to radioactive contamination)
2. 有被利用到战争中的可能性

During the operation of nuclear power plants, radioactive waste is produced, which in turn can be used for the production of nuclear weapons. In addition, the same know-how used to design nuclear power plants can to a certain extent be used to build nuclear weapons (nuclear proliferation).

环境： 相对清洁，比起化石燃料. Lower carbon dioxide (and other greenhouse gases) released into the atmosphere in power generation

效率原则：运用范围更广.Large power-generating capacity able to meet industrial and city needs .

观点问题：这个话题，很难规定大怎么写。建议是你正面的素材充分，就写她是很好的能源。如果是反面素材多，就写她的弊端过多。接下来挑选的是正面观点（即利大于弊）进行框架写作。

文章框架：
Intro:
导入话题
The dialogue about using nuclear power – and expanding it – centers on weighing the risks against the rewards. A number of people are afraid of its use, or more exactly, afraid of hidden dangers associated with its use.
2)  我的观点
Despite that, I am strongly convinced that the benefits of nuclear power will overweigh the disadvantages in the long run.

Body 1:
1)分论点
First of all, large power-generating capacity adds force to the use of nuclear energy.
2)论证思路：To be more specific, low-power technologies like solar might meet only local, residential, or office needs but cannot generate power for heavy manufacturing. On the contrary, nuclear energy could satisfy not only household, commercial but also industrial needs.

Body 2

1. 分论点

Moreover, nuclear energy proves to be a clean energy compared with fossil fuels.

2. 论证思路：Nuclear power generation does emit relatively low amounts of carbon dioxide (CO2).  The emissions of green house gases and therefore the contribution of nuclear power plants to global warming is therefore relatively little.

Body 3

1. 分论点

Admittedly, no garden is without weeds, which is the same for nuclear energy. In fact, it poses potential danger to people.
2) 论证思路
Many people died when the Chernobyl disaster struck plus people are still struggling with high rates of cancer and other diseases that were caused by exposure to the radiation. There are people who have diseases directly attributed to the nuclear meltdown at Chernobyl, even though they were not even born at the time it occurred.

1. 适度反驳

Fortunately, most countries have given top priority to these risks.

Conclusion:
To sum up, the nuclear science and technology have provided the means, for good or for bad. And the world must seize it for good, for safe use forever.

环球名师简介：

邹燕萍——上海写作教师
【特色】中英对比是教学主线。讲课注重剖析学生犯错原因，然后辅以解决策略。力求根本解决写作和阅读的一些通病。
【经历】香港浸会大学语言学硕士。