雅思OG写作Test2 Task2解析

为考生做了雅思OG写作Test2 Task2的解析。

雅思 OG 写作审题要 (Task focus)
这是一道关于医疗与老龄的问题。这道题给出了一个社会现状,即医疗条件的改善使得人们越来越长寿。 题干给出这个现象,并问考生是否 the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantage。 考生应该通过各种论证方式,分别讨论这一现象的优缺点,后给出自己的观点。
雅思 OG 写作写作思路 (Think before writing)
面对优缺点类文章,一般在文章开头交代一下背景信息,然后分段讨论话题的优点和缺点,后再结尾段 总结上文提到的观点,并明确提出自己的观点。在这篇文章中,开头段可以用自己的话交代一下医疗改善 让人越来越长寿的这个社会现象,为下*铺垫。然后用一或两个主体段讨论人长寿的缺点(或优点),再用 另一个主体段做出让步,承认其在某种情况下也有优点(或缺点)。在每个主体段中都可以列分观点,并且用 符合逻辑的论证方式来支撑观点。后的结尾段,明确的提出自己的观点,要对优缺点进行总结概括,而 不是一味的强调一方面的优点或缺点。
雅思 OG 写作范文演示 (Sample *ysis)

Model Response

Over the past 50 years, people have become used to the idea that they will probably live longer than their grandparents did. However, a longer life is only desirable if you can look after

yourself and be independent, otherwise there can be disadvantages for everyone. If you walk into a hospital in my country, you are likely to see a lot more elderly people than you did in the past. In fact, this is causing significant problems as there is a shortage of beds. Medical treatment is keeping the elderly alive, but at what cost to others? On top of this, one of the biggest medical problems these days is dementia. Even if old people are still fit, they may not be able to look after themselves. They may have to live with their children or be cared for in a home, which can be expensive. Elderly people do not like to be a

burden, but their children can feel obliged to care for them. Obviously, not all old people become ill. Those who remain healthy can enjoy a happy old age as long as they have saved enough money. People are more active in their sixties and seventies than they used to be and this can only be a good thing. They have time to enjoy their retirement and do a range of activities that they could not do when they were at work. They can also help look after their grandchildren, which is a great benefit for working parents. To sum up, I believe that we should aim to keep people as healthy as possible so that they can enjoy their old age without having to rely on others. A longer life expectancy is obviously advantageous, but no one wants to live to be 100 if they only cause problems for their family

and society.

雅思 OG 写作词汇句型 (Vocabulary and patterns)

	与医疗、老龄相关的单词		• dementia • burden • obliged • retirement	• cost • independent • alive • fit/ healthy
	与医疗、老龄相关的词组		• life expectancy • Medical treatment • medical care • a range of activities	• elderly people • rely on • look after • remain healthy
	句型		• have become used to the idea that... • ...is only desirable if... • be likely to... • this is causing significant problems as... • on top of this • even if...	• as long as • ..., which is a great benefit for... • Obviously,... • To sum up,... • ...so that... • enjoy...without... • no one...if... • Those who...

雅思 OG 写作范文亮点 (Sample highlights)
1 段:改写原题
范文开头段先交代背景,提出近年来大普遍认为现代人要比以前的人更长寿。接着又用 however 指出 长寿可以是好事,但在某种情况下又有可能带来问题,巧妙地引出下面主体的分段讨论。这避免了在主体 段提出自己的观点,并且说明了接下来的主体段是讨论话题的优缺点。

2 段:主体段一
个主体段讨论的是人长寿、老年人增加的缺点。先用 if 引导假设论证,指出医院中老年人越来越多, 这给医疗增加了压力,例如床位短缺,同时用反问句 but at what cost to others 影射老龄化还会带来其 他代价。
3 段:主体段二
二个主体段用 on top of this 自然地过渡,讨论的是医疗难以解决的问题,即老年痴呆症。文中用实例 指出这样的老年人即使健康,也不能照顾自己,这就需要和孩子住一起或者去养老院。老人不想成为负担, 但是孩子有抚养老人的义务。
4段:主体段三
三个主体段用 obviously 引出了后文的让步,指出不是所有的老年人都有健康问题,那些健康、有积蓄 的老年人可以很好的享受晚年。退休的他们有时间、有精力,还能帮忙带孙辈。
5段:总结全文
后的结尾段总结上文的观点,先用 I believe that we should aim to...表明老年人只有计划持健康,才 能不依赖他人更好地享受晚年生活。然后紧扣题目中的问题,指出长寿本身是优势,但如果这会给人和 社会带来问题的话,大概没有人想活到100岁了。
结语
整片文章观点明确,分段清晰,衔接自然,运用了不同的逻辑论证方法,词汇使用得当,是非常精炼的优
缺点类范文,值得考生参考。

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