雅思写作7.5分+观点表达段落是如何练成的

雅思写作7.5分+观点表达段落是如何练成的 ！考生在大作文写作中，需要经过观点—表达—段落的飞跃，以下是 老师的详述。

譬如，我们现在的一个题目是：

Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

现在我们先想观点，我们此处对“观点”进行定义，观点是一串（至少3个）由动词+名词构成的表达。必须是一串，不能是一个，否则论证不深入，篇幅也短。

观点1：长不能维持纪律——孩子行为不端——缺乏自控。

加粗斜体下划线部分就是动词+名词构成的表达

接下来是表达：表达就是把上面的观点写成英文。

parents fail to maintain discipline 1 —— children mi*ehave 2 —— unable to develop self-control 3.

形成段落：

One reason is that if parents fail to maintain a certain amount of discipline in their home, it is very likely for their children to mi*ehave and push against boundaries. This may lead to children’s inability to regulate their desires and develop self-control.

这里的一串因果论证，我们用的是这种结构

One reason is that if 1, it is very likely for * to 2. This may lead to 3.

这里1和2是用条件句，3用的是名词形式。

再来一个观点：

观点2：长屈服于孩子物质需求——孩子变物质——庭财务出问题

表达成英文：

parents give in to their children’s material needs 1 —— materialistic children 2 —— a domestic financial problem may occur 3

形成段落：

The other reason is that parents who constantly give in to their children’s material needs may end up having materialistic children, wanting more material goods than their parents can provide. A domestic financial problem may therefore occur and this problem would be a detriment to all family members.

这里的一串因果论证，我们用的是这种结构

The other reason is that parents who 1 may end up 2. 3

这里的1嵌套在一个句子的定语从句里的，2是句子的中心动词，3立成句。

用条件句和从句来表达因果，能够避免过度使用传统意义上的because, so, therefore, thus... 使表达多样化，同时计划证文章的篇幅。

观点和相应的表达（一串（至少3个）由动词+名词构成的中英文表达）在范文或者其他的表达中不难找，此处不赘述了。

以下是我们用上述两个动词+名词观点串组成的段落。

There are two reasons why critics may disapprove of permissive and material parenting. One reason is that if parents fail to maintain a certain amount of discipline in their home, it is very likely for their children to mi*ehave and push against boundaries. This may lead to children’s inability to regulate their desires and develop self-control. The other reason is that parents who constantly give in to their children’s material needs may end up having materialistic children, wanting more material goods than their parents can provide. A domestic financial problem may therefore occur and this problem would be a detriment to all family members.

这样的篇幅更加适合四段式的主题段。

下面我们分享另外一种段落写作方式，就是一个观点串+一个例子的方式来写。

先写观点串：线上社交 ——导致孤立 —— 导致抑郁以及其他健康问题

然后写英文：people socialising online 1 —— isolation 2 —— depression and other issues 3

形成段落：

One serious problem that can arise from people socialising online is that it can lead to isolation. （举例开始）Before the internet, people would frequently go out to meet friends, for example in cafes, bars or restaurants, whereas now people prefer to stay at home alone, chatting online. As a result, people are starting to spend the majority of their time alone at home in their room without meeting others.（举例结束） Isolation of this kind is not healthy and can sometimes lead to depression and other issues.

在2和3中间插了个对比的例子

这样的篇幅更加适合五段式的主题段