雅思OG写作Test5 Task1解析

为考生做了雅思OG写作Test5 Task1的解析 ：

雅思 OG 写作 审题要(Task focus) W R I T I NG
这篇小作文由两个饼状图(pie chart)组成。题目显示了 2003 年和 2021 年,新西兰网络营销产品所占 比例的变化。考生需要提取并总结主要信息,同时做出相关对比。从图表信息我们可以看到,比较的零售 产品内容为旅行、电影或音乐、书籍以及服装。图一中占比例较大的两个产品为旅游和服装;图二中占比 例较大的是电影或音乐以及旅行。
雅思 OG 写作 写作思路(Thinking before writing)
考生需要在 150 字之内对图表里的信息进行概括,有侧重的描写主要特征,必要时选择适当省略。我们 要特别注意两张饼图中突出的以及变化的信息。比较突出的信息是:在 2003 年,旅行消费所占的比例 大,其他三项比较平均,但书籍少;到了 2021 年,电影音乐占的比例大,其次是旅行,服装占比 少。变化的信息是:从 2003 到 2021 年,电影音乐和书籍两项占比增加,而旅行和服装占比缩小。根据 所获得的信息,范文按照变化信息,将占比变化大的两项旅行和电影音乐归为一段,再将所占比例变化 较小的两项书籍和服装归为一段,分别进行比较描写。这是比较理想的行文方式。
雅思 OG 写作 范文演示(Sample *ysis)
The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2021. For three of the sectors, it is evident that over this time frame there was significant change in their proportion of online transactions.
At 36% we can see that the travel sector accounted for the majority of online sales in 2003, but this percentage had dropped to 29% by 2021. Across the same ten-year period, as an increasing number of people chose to purchase films and music online, we can see that transactions went from just 21% to 33%, making it the retail sector with the highest overall share of the online market.
In 2003, the clothing industry boasted an impressive 24% of total online sales in New Zealand. However, by 2021, the figure had fallen considerably to 16%. Interestingly, online sales of books eventually overtook sales of clothes, although books still represented only 22% of the market.  (162 words)
雅思 OG 写作 范文亮点(Sample highlights)
1 段:改写原题
段通常为题目的改写或提炼,在范文中,题目信息被提取为 compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors. 这里的“compare the percentages”和“across different retail sectors”用得很好。紧接着强调了文章主要抓住了三个项目(For three of the sectors),在显示 的时间范围内(over this time frame),他们的变化十分显著(it is evident that there was significant change in their proportion of online transactions)。
2 段:主体段一
我们可以看到(At 36% we can see),在 2003 年,旅行项目以 36%的比例高居网络*榜(the travel sector accounted for the majority of online sales),但是到了 2021 年却降到了 29%。同样经 历了十年的时间(Across the same ten-year period),随着越来越多的人们选择网购电影和音乐(as an increasing number of people chose to purchase films and music online),我们可以看到这一项 目所占比例从 21%增长到了 33%,成为网络市场的大份额(making it the retail sector with the highest overall share of the online market)。
3 段:主体段二
2003 年,新西兰服装产业占据了网销总量的 24%,十分令人钦佩(boasted an impressive 24% of total online sales)。然而,到 2021 年,数额明显下滑至 16%(the figure had fallen considerably to)。有意思的是,尽管书籍的在线销量仅占 22%的市场份额,但它还是超越了(eventually overtook)服装的销量。
结语
这篇小作文结构合理,逻辑清晰,语言运用准确恰当,篇幅短小精悍,数据变化表达的多样性是这篇范文的大亮点,非常值得考生学习借鉴。

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