雅思OG写作Test4 Task1解析

为考生做了雅思OG写作Test4 Task1的解析。

雅思OG写作审题要(Task focus) W R I T I NG
这篇小作文是一幅柱形图(bar chart)。题目显示了 Southland 地区 2000 年和当年(2021 年)的主要 出口产品,以及未来 2025 年的出口项目规划。考生需要提取并总结主要信息,同时做出相关对比。从图 表信息我们可以看到,横轴分别代表旅游业(international touri*)、奶制品(dairy products)和肉 制品(meat products);纵轴代表出口额数,从 0 到 10(单位:£ billion)。
雅思OG写作写作思路(Thinking before writing)
考生需要在 150 字之内对图表里的信息进行概括,有侧重的描写主要特征,必要时选择适当省略。本文 既涉及到不同出口项目之间的横向比较,还要考虑同一项目中不同年份数额的纵向比较。文章推荐的组织 方式是以横向为主要顺序,三个项目各成一个主体段,分别描写。根据图标信息总体横向来看,旅游业占 有多的出口份额,奶制品其次,肉制品少。纵向来说,从 2000 年到 2025 年,旅游业的出口份额持 续增长;奶制品出口份额先涨后落;肉制品出口份额持续减少。由于图表信息横跨过去、现在和未来,考 生在写作时需要特别注意调整时态。
雅思OG写作范文演示(Sample *ysis)
Model Response
This bar chart illustrates the performance of Southland's primary exports in 2000 and 2021. It also indicates future projections for 2025.
According to the data, it seems likely that international touri* will become the dominant industry, although dairy exports will remain strong. In 2000, we can see that touri* was the
greatest exports earner of the three industries, with revenue standing at just over £8 billion. This figure has increased slightly, so that now, in 2021, it has reached almost £9 billion. It is estimated that international touri* will continue to grow, so that by 2025, it will be earning around £10 billion for the country.
In 2000, dairy exports were worth around £7 billion, but since then there has been a dramatic increase, and sales for this year are approximately £10 billion. Experts are predicting that exports in this area may fall slightly, so a figure of £9.5 billion is expected for 2025.
Meat products are the third key industry in Southland, but sales have dropped since 2000 and now stand at £5.5 billion. It is expected that sales will continue to decrease in the future.
(187 words)
雅思OG写作范文亮点(Sample highlights)
1 段:改写原题
段通常为题目的改写或提炼,在范文中,原题里的 gives information about...变为 illustrates the performance of...,原题里的 main export 变为 primary export,并用 indicates 引出 future projections,这一系列的动词和形容词转换非常出色,既计划留了原意,又提高了词汇等。
2 段:主体段一
描写旅游业 2000-2025 年的出口额,并进行了相关比较。根据数据(According to the data),旅游业 占有统治地位(dominant industry),奶制品紧随其次。在 2000 年,旅游业获得多的出口额(the greatest exports earner),达到超过 80 亿并小幅增长(increased slightly),在 2021 年几乎达到 (reached almost)90 亿。据估计(It is estimated that...),旅游业出口额还会持续增长(continue to grow),到 2025 年可能会为收获约 100 亿份额。
3 段:主体段二
描写奶制品 2000-2025 年的出口额。在 2000 年奶制品出口价值约 70 亿,但随即剧增(since then there has been a dramatic increase),2021 年的销量高达近 100 亿。预测(Experts are predicting that...),这一出口项目到 2025 年会轻微回落(fall slightly)至 95 亿左右。
4段:主体段三
描写旅游业 2000-2025 年的出口额。肉制品是三重要的出口产业(the third key industry),但是从 2000 年开始销量一直下滑(have dropped since...),今年为 55 亿,据推测,其出口份额在将来还会继 续下降(continue to decrease)。
结语
这篇小作文结构合理,逻辑连贯,语言清晰,词汇的多样性是这篇范文的大亮点。文中使用了不同词性 的 earner, revenue, earn, worth, sales 来表达收入和出口额的概念;用 over, almost, around, approximately 来表示数据的约数浮动,用 estimate, predict, expect 来描述未来预测,用词多样准 确,非常值得考生学习借鉴。
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