让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 解读最新雅思作文评分标准

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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议

　　中国烤鸭在雅思写作中，极爱用长难句，自己感觉一写长难句就会高大上，但其实不然。本文中新东方雅思网将为大家提出一些让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的建议，供大家参考。

建议一：避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。

比如：When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：

Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换

例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

建议二：避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复，但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改为：

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表达方式为：

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换

例如：My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly，显得更为简洁：

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

建议三：选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要，但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则：

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如：The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来分析，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是situation，谓语动词是was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念，可以改为下面这句话：

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构

例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为：

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为：

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如：Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表达方式为：

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态。

例如：In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”，而使用了被动语态後，彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一些：

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语，

例如：My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达，即loiter：

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达

例如：Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子：

Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

解读最新雅思作文评分标准

　　1、well-organized：文章采用的论述结构，分几个部分论述，每部分有几段，各部分、各段间的关系是什么。

　　2、sentence variety：最好长短句结合，ets藐视总用短句的人：Since most of the sentences are short and choppy,the ideas they try to com municate are also choppy。

　　3、complexity：事物的两面性(同一事物有优点就有缺点，相比较的事物有各自的优缺点)，从多角度分析事物(分析不同领域中，不同情况下)。论点一边倒的文章论述得再好也只能得5分。

　　4、connecting ideas logically：using transitional phrases起承转合词，过渡句，或有此种作用的句子，总之起到help organize the ideas and move the argument forward。

　　5、conveys meaning skillfully：可用于论证的一切技巧(估计老美自己用起来也得费点心思)。比如文章的行文方向，起承转合不用明显的标志词(first,second,however,on the otherhand,the second example illustrating my point)，而是依靠论述的内在脉络(只可意会不可言传)自然而然的引到下一块内容。

　　6、compelling reasons：reason就已经够令人头疼的了，有加了个compelling，这是最重要的一个得分点。

　　7、well-focused：简单说就是不跑题。中心论点明确，全文不跑题;各段主题句明确，围绕主题句论述。

　　8、persuasive examples：用来支持reason的，使抽象的reason更具体，更易被读者理解，从而产生共鸣，或使其更可信，更有说服力。可用的例子有自己的经历，引言。

　　9、insightful position：在有全面深刻理解的基础上，观点最好新颖独到(对ets来说)，但必须保证能自圆其说。

　　10、没有十分地把握，不要乱下定义，严重的损害议论文严谨的文风。不论是内容上还是形式上，总结也要做到避免重复有层次，先表面后深刻，先分段后整体。

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