雅思作文常见题型 雅思作文修改：网络代替学校

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文常见题型 雅思作文修改：网络代替学校，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文常见题型 表格题磨练解析

表格题也是雅思作文中的常见题型，反复重现，磨练好表格题的作文技巧相当重要，筒子们来通过下面这篇范文，好好揣摩吧。

2008年6月5日

You should spend 20 minutes on this task.

The table below shows the cost of water in five Australian cities in 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

City Usage charge per kilolitre

(up to 125kl) Usage charge per kilolitre

(over 125kl) Water bill per household

Adelaide $0.42 $1.0 $310

Bri*ane $0.78 $0.78 $312

Melbourne $0.84 $0.84 $253

Perth $0.42 $1.5 $332

Sydney $0.98 $0.98 $319

Sample Answer:

The figure gives the information about how the water cost in five cities of Australia Year 2004 is compared. (这不仅仅是单纯的对题目文字的改写，更重要的是暗示考官“我已经充分读懂了题目，下面要把表格阐述的尽善尽美。”)

Specifically,(这是一个信号，标志着整篇文章采取“总分”的形式。考官很容易理解你的思路，并且站在你的角度去考虑问题) in 2004, water bill each household, the least of all items, (不要小看这个插入语，它可以让你的句式更为活泼，逻辑更为严谨，增加强调的意味，体现出你的语言水平)was 253 dollars in Melbourne, where the usage charge per kiloliter was 0.84 dollars, whether the total of water use was up to 125 kiloliter or over. The similar pattern was found in usage charge per kiloliter in Sydney and Bri*ane, 0.98 dollars and 0.78 dollars respectively.(我还想向考生推荐这个词。在众多的数字和表格项面前，纵然你能够始终保持清醒，但是你不能保证你啰嗦的描述让考官一直把你的文章看完。用一下这个词，众多的数字可以放在一起，用一个简洁的句型一目了然。) By contrast,(它的意思是“对照、对比”。后面的内容与前面的内容具有相同的量级，但是具有不同的方向。) that of Adelaide, 0.42 dollars, was the same as that of Perth when the total is no more than 125 kiloliters, but once the total was beyond the limit, both increased to 1.0 and 1.5 dollars individually. The water bill per family in Perth, the top, was 332 dollars, but that in other three cities was nearly 310 dollars.

All in all, in many parts of Australia the water charge per kiloliter depends on the total of water use, while the pattern is not in Bri*ane, Melbourne and Sydney. And there is a big difference in (这是一个总结，与开头相呼应告诉考官你的英文功底是扎实的，不会写虎头蛇尾的文章)water cost per family in the five cities.

雅思作文修改：网络代替学校

很多同学发来四段式的作文给我，但是真正能写好四段式的没有几个，下面这篇的错误比较典型，给大家参考。

题目如下：schools are no longer necessary, because children can get so much information available through Internet, and they can study just as well at home.What extent do you agree or disagree?

Scientific developments have brought us many benefits, among which the internet must be the most spectacular one. In the near future, it might take the place of schools so that it is convenient for children to obtain knowledge.

我很高兴地看到你可以把上课时讲的很多句子和单词应用在这篇四段式文章中，但是我划横线的句子表现出了你一定的倾向性，你可以把这句改为（there has long been a discussion about the opinion that whether the internet could take the place of schools.）这样可以做到客观的引入话题，而不表明观点。

With time going by, Internet has become an encyclopedia in some degree. It seems that there are an increasing number of children are fund of getting information from the Internet. Some of them are in a great need of gaining information while others just surf it as a hobby. As is known to all that encyclopedia is large enough to satisfy those little children and of course the knowledge in textbooks is included. In that case, there is no need to employ teachers to teach children. As a result children can study just as well at home and get a good grade.

However, there are certainly demerits in studying at home with the Internet. People who make the webpages can make mistakes and some knowledge is completely wrong. As a child, it is not an easy job to distinguish the information. Unlike at home, children are able to obtain knowledge in a systematic way. Besides, children who study at home are more withdrawn than those who study at schools. What is more, children don’t require teachers and that means people who now are teachers will lose their jobs. It may cause the dissipation of human resources and their families are in great trouble of making a living.

上面一段有两个问题：

1.负面的问题我觉得分析的不够，错误应该只是一个小的方面，更重要的应该是：没有人引导，孩子的学习效率会比较低下。

2.我读了划横线的句子后，感觉你的观点应该是支持网络替代学校，因为你用了，certainly这个让步词，但是你在下面一段却表明了跟我的猜测相反的观点，前后不一致，这个是致命的错误。

My view is that schools are still necessary in the future. That is the best way for children to not only get their knowledge in a systematic way but also develop their interpersonal skills. Internet is, in the long run , just a tool to widen their horizons.

如果我打分的话，Band 5

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