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雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核,综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力,实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说,也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分 雅思作文开头写作技巧详解,希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题,敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分 雅思作文开头写作技巧详解

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯!

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题,有时候觉得自己写得很不错,但是得分却很低,本文中,新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同, 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.



In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和 long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数: There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态: as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文开头写作技巧详解

  雅思作文开头写作技巧详解,雅思从听、说、读、写四方面进行英语能力全面考核。下面小编为大家介绍一下,供大家参考。

  雅思分学术类(Academic)和普通类(General Training)两种题型,学术类主要适合留学生或访问学者,普通类主要适合移民申请人和某些非留学类别(例如工作签证)的申请人。雅思考试产生听说读写四个单项分数,单项的满分是9分(精通英语),其次是8分(优秀英语),7分(良好英语),6分(掌握英语),5分(勉强掌握),4分(有限英语),3分(少量英语),2分(少量单词),1分(不懂英语),0分(没有考试)。出国留学网雅思频道为大家提供了这四个方面的资料,希望对大家有所帮助。小编祝愿大家都能成为精通英语的雅思烤鸭。

  按照我们以往的写作教学经验来看,大家或许都有这么一个感受:在课堂上,老师眉飞色舞在讲台上滔滔不绝,时而这种秘诀,时而那种方法,偶尔还夹杂着各种幽默搞笑的段子,听得大家不亦乐乎,但真到了随堂练习让大家自己动笔练习的时候,困难才会排山倒海般地呼啸而来,原来自己往往在课堂上跟着老师的思路,借助着他人的指点,一步步走向了成功,但一旦离开了外在的辅助,却很快就被打回原形,各种语法错误、时态混乱,甚至是信息不全。这种问题长久以来困扰着广大雅思考生,而同时,对于雅思培训师们也一直纠结于此。究竟有没有一种快速高效的方法来方便考生独立自主、高效正确地完成一篇满足雅思写作6-6.5分要求的文章呢­其实,如果大家注意留意雅思发展历史的话,不难发现,雅思在走过20个年头后,很多考察内容已经定格化,形式化,甚至八股化。所以,我们只要将文章进行模块化并加以有效组合,就可以达到理想的成绩;当然,最基本的词汇量和语法知识是这一过程上的基石,不容忽略。

  一篇文章,开头段非常重要,古话说:好的开头,成功的一半。我开始不理解,后来才发现,这句话的意思是暗示开头做得好,后面就有信心,如果开篇就卡住,考生会手心冒汗,心里盘算着飞逝的时间,哪还有心思写好下文。所以本篇内容将会具体指导大家如何圆满地,不留任何漏洞地完成小作文开头段的创作。我的方法是最为简单快速的开头改写,因为这种方法不需要考生动脑子,方便易学,省去了绞尽脑汁用中式英语替换文章词句的麻烦。

  我将开头段的写作技巧分成4种:

  1, 同义词的替换及多余词汇删除

  2, 遇到量词、变化、原因、时间等词(quantity, number, amount, change, reason, cause, time)变化为状语从句形式(how many, how much, how….change, why, when);避免组合名词带来的不规范

  3, 组合图表造成的题目过长、过复杂,可以拆分为the 1st chart,the 2nd chart

  4, 用图表中的title替换题目内容(图表中没有title时不适用)

  以上四种方法可以成功改写雅思小作文一切开头段,但要注意的是并不是所有的方法可以同时使用,要培养考生自身的灵活性,根据所需来运用技法。

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