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雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核,综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力,实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说,也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文审题技巧,希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题,敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文审题技巧

雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯


大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同,这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数:There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态:as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文审题技巧

  很多技能的学习,都有一个从不了解到了解,从陌生到熟悉的过程。对于以前没有接触过写作或者练习写作不多的考生来说,拿到一个作文题目往往不知道从何下手。为解决这个问题,下面给大家提供一些练习写作中的基本思路和写作步骤。本章字数虽然不多,但作用非常关键,希望读者认真体会并掌握其中思路。


  拿到题目首先要认真审题。很多考生认为只要是把字数写够,用了一些比较高级的词汇和复合句就算完成了任务。其实,这种想法指导下的写作在实际考试中很容易使考生忽视把握论证的方向,造成写作扣题不严密,论点表述不完整,更严重还会导致跑题。最近雅思作文题目中争论的焦点难以把握。很多考生看到题目中认识的单词,然后就发挥自己想象,天马行空下笔就写。但是这样的作文无论语言质量多高,也拿不到好的分数。只有把握题目争论重心,才能保证论证有的放矢,获得高分。

  例子 1、
  Air transport is increasingly being used to export many types of fruits and vegetables to countries where those plants can’t grow or are out of season. Some say that it is a good thing, but others consider that such use of air transport can’t be justified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 空运各种蔬菜和水果到不出产这些蔬菜水果的国家或者到这些东西已经过季了的国家越来越司空见惯,有人赞同,有人反对,请评价双方论点并给出自己的看法。


  题目分析:
  这篇作文为2004年9月18日A类雅思考题。题目表面是谈论蔬菜水果和空运的话题,实际上考生需要明白蔬菜、水果作为食品属于商品,商品的一个特点就是要满足不同层次的消费需要。作为一种高成本的服务方式,空运满足的是高消费水平人群,而其他低成本运输服务方式满足的是普通消费水平人群。明白了这一点,就很容易分别解释、评价两种对立论点,最后进行总结,提出自己看法。

  很多经验不足的考生审题时思路往往不清楚,抓不住问题的主要和本质方面。针对本题的飞机和蔬菜,有的考生可能会描写飞机运输的便利性,然后联想到飞机的发明、对人类的贡献等等和题目关联性很小的话题上,也可能会有考生花费很多篇幅讨论蔬菜和水果对人体健康的重要性,诸如此类的论点都属于跑题。


  例子 2、Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories with their employees to the countryside. To what extend do you agree or disagree? 交通和住房是城市的主要问题,把大公司和工厂及员工移到郊区可能解决该问题,你同意这样的看法吗?

  题目分析:
  该题目提出大城市交通堵塞和居住紧张问题,建议解决方案是把大公司和员工转移到郊区。根据我们的生活经验和知识,造成上述问题原因可能有很多,文中并没有提供任何证据说明大公司和其员工是造成问题的主要原因。考生可以提出一些其他原因证明这个解决方案可能不会奏效。这些原因可以是:交通设施落后old transport infrastructure、交通管理水平低下poor traffic control、城市人口增长过快 fast population growth、住房供应不足 inadequate housing supply等。如果考生不深入思考这个题目可能会提出类似以下错误论点:

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