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雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核,综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力,实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说,也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分 总汇雅思作文写作技巧,希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题,敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分 总汇雅思作文写作技巧

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯!

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题,有时候觉得自己写得很不错,但是得分却很低,本文中,新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同, 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.


In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和 long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数: There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态: as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

总汇雅思作文写作技巧

1、写作文可以想到几个点,但是进行扩写的时候就觉得很困难,怎么去扩充自己的论据

作文观点所需的支持论据,可以从以下几个渠道进行获取:考生自己的经历;身边发生的事情;以及其他的媒体渠道所提供的信息。然而,对于这三类信息,本站们建议考生能够在一篇文章中适当进行组合,而不是仅仅使用某一类论据来进行论证。对于第一类和第二类论据,即考生自身的经历和身边发生的事情,相对来说比较容易组织;第三类信息的论据,则需要考生在平时的学习中注意积累,不是一朝一夕可以完成的。换句话说,考生平时应注意增加阅读和扩大知识面的机会,比如多读书看报,当然英文书报为首选,多了解时下发生的事件,这些信息无疑对于写作的论据收集是很有帮助的。在比较专业的雅思考试培训课程当中,写作老师也会有针对性地去归纳和总结一些论据以供学生使用。

2、句型不能灵活运用,总感觉句子写的很生硬,怎么将句子写得“好”

句型的灵活运用,从评分角度来理解,即写作评分的最后一个指标GRA(GrammaticalRange&Accuracy).这一评分内容指得是是否能够灵活地运用不同的句型,深层次的意思理解为是否能够综合运用简单句、复合句和复杂句。在文章中,这些句子间或出现,会使整篇文章读起来有起伏感和节奏感。另外,要想写出好的句子,必须先去接触和学习好的句子。所以考生不应该闷头自己造句,而应该多看nativespeaker写的语言,来丰富自己的语言资料库,并加以针对性地学习和训练,以达到提高自己句子组织能力的效果。

心态:

从雅思考试四部分来看,考生一般认为阅读和听力具备大量的解题技巧,只要将这些解题技巧掌握了,提高就会很快。而口语也有一系列的应付方法和考场对策。但是,相对而言,写作却是英语综合能力的体现,考生认为短短几个月的时间内突飞猛进基本不现实,因此对写作抱一种恐慌心态。于是得过且过,认为只要写作将就就行,自己不如把时间多花在听力和阅读上来帮自己“拉分”。持此种观点的中国考生不在少数,造成这样一种情况:大多考生对写作热情不高,把大量时间和精力花在阅读听力的练习上,从而到头来写作总的来说都没练过几次,以至于找不到写作文的一种节奏和感觉。到了考场上,必然会因为发挥不出真实的写作水平导致分数不理想。

高分经验:

1、有足够的练习。这个练习指的是完整地写够量的作文,不管是大作文还是小作文。雅思的作文题目(TASK1和TASK2)可以总结成很多种类,在培训班上老师都会为本站们总结出来,因为不知道会考哪一类题目,所以每一类热门题都要做足够练习。

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