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雅思作文想拿高分 词汇量不足怎么写好雅思作文

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯!

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题,有时候觉得自己写得很不错,但是得分却很低,本文中,新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同, 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.


In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和 long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数: There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态: as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

词汇量不足怎么写好雅思作文

提到雅思写作,不少考生的第一反应就是词汇量,认为词汇量越大,雅思写作的分数自然就会越高。这种想法是存在一定道理的,我们常说,词汇就像搭建房屋的砖块,砖块数量越多,房屋就能搭得越高越大,反之估计就只能砌一面墙而已。于是很多考生都会把词汇书视之为救命稻草,夜以继日地狂背,以期在最短时间内迅速增大词汇量。

积累词汇,无可厚非,但如果只是从A到Z一味地背诵词汇,那就是一种浪费时间,消耗精力而且收效颇微的方法了,其原因在于:一、大多数人都会半途而废,背了后面忘了前面,所以往往词汇书的前面部分会被翻得比较旧,而后面部分几乎“人迹罕至”;二、通过背词汇书所积累的单词,往往只停留在认知或眼熟的程度,想要在写作中,特别是雅思考场写作中想到并且正确运用的可能性是很小的。

那么,在词汇量不足的情况下,怎样攻克雅思写作难关呢?

八字原则:有的放矢,标本兼治。

一方面,通过对雅思写作的了解和官方范文的研读,不难发现,雅思写作可能涉及到的词汇并非漫无边际,而是围绕教育、社会、环境等大众话题展开的,在语言表达方面,更多强调用词的准确和多变,而不是考查用词的专业和难度,因此考生在备考的时候,可以按照相关话题进行词汇的梳理,既可以是别人已经整理好的,也可以是自己从阅读各类话题范文中摘录出来的。这些词汇跟雅思写作紧密相关,有话题语境为背景,又加以合理归类,所以遗忘率会较低而利用率则较高。而对于话题中的少数专业词汇,建议视时间和能力,量力而行,可以明确,没有专业词汇,雅思写作照样可以拿七分。

另一方面,雅思写作和其他考场作文一样,受考查形式的制约,其评判本身是存在一定局限性的。换句话说,考官并不了解考生真实的写作能力,或者具体到词汇量的大小,他只能根据这几百个单词的文章来进行判断,所以从考试的角度来说,词汇量相对有限的考生只要使文章中词汇“显得比较丰富”就可以了。做到这点,主要有两个方法:

第一、同义转换。设想碰到一个懂中文的外国人,他在和你交谈的过程中涉及到钱的话题,他不光会说中文的人民币、钞票,还会说大团结、老人头,甚至连孔方兄都知道,你会觉得他的中文词汇量小么?同样的,一篇雅思作文中,如果你在表达“重要”这个出现频率极高的意思的时候,除了important以外,还可以把crucial, critical, vital, indispensable等词信手拈来的话,有什么理由让考官觉得你的词汇量不足呢,当然,或许你也就只积累了几个写作中高频出现的词汇而已,但效果已经达到了,不是么?

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