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雅思作文:一边倒结构PK对称式结构

一边倒结构PK对称式结构

辩论型题目,我们讲了两种写法,也就是两种结构,两种模板。那么,这两种结构,哪种更好呢?考试的时候,我使用哪种结构呢?下面,我们把这两种结构比较一下。

(一)有些辩论型题目,只能使用“对称式结构”,不能使用“一边倒结构”。

辩论型题目的提问方式,一般有如下5种:

1.(To what extent) do you agree or disagree?

2.What is your opinion?

3.What do you think?

4.What are the advantages and disadvantages of sth?

5.What are the benefits and drawbacks of sth?

6.Discuss both sides and give your opinion。

其中,前三种提问方式,使用“一边倒结构”和“对称式结构”都可以。但是,对后三种提问方式,一定要使用“对称式结构”。也就是说,所有的辩论型题目,都能使用“对称式结构”,但有些辩论型题目,不能使用“一边倒结构”。“对称式结构”比“一边倒结构”的使用范围广。如果你只想会一种结构,那应该只会“对称式结构”,不能只会“一边倒结构”。

(二)“对称式结构”比“一边倒结构”好写。

“对称式结构”双方都说,“一边倒结构”只说一方。显然,“对称式结构”比“一边倒结构”可说的内容多,更容易写够字数。

(三)使用“一边倒结构”的人少,写作难度大,因此起评分高。

考试中心统计数据表明,在每次考试中,大约80%的考生使用“对称式结构”,只有不到20%的考生使用“一边倒结构”。考官都是语言专家、写作专家,对出现此现象的原因,心知肚明。因此,使用“对称式结构”的文章,起评分为6分,而使用“一边倒结构” 的文章,起评分为6.5分

通过以上三轮PK,我们应该得出结论:“一边倒结构”和“对称式结构”各有利弊。“对称式结构”适用范围广,而且好写,但使用的人多。有些辩论型题目不能使用“一边倒结构”,而且难写,但“一边倒结构” 起评分高。

因此,准备充分的考生,最好两种结构都掌握。在考试时,结合具体的题目再做出选择。基础弱的考生,如果觉得负担重,只想会一种结构,那应该只会“对称式结构”。

而且,语言是最重要的评分标准。即使使用“一边倒结构”,如果语言很差,一样不能得到满意的分数。即使使用“对称式结构”,如果语言很好,一样可以得7分8分。

雅思作文修改:网络代替学校

很多同学发来四段式的作文给我,但是真正能写好四段式的没有几个,下面这篇的错误比较典型,给大家参考。

题目如下:schools are no longer necessary, because children can get so much information available through Internet, and they can study just as well at home.What extent do you agree or disagree?

Scientific developments have brought us many benefits, among which the internet must be the most spectacular one. In the near future, it might take the place of schools so that it is convenient for children to obtain knowledge.

我很高兴地看到你可以把上课时讲的很多句子和单词应用在这篇四段式文章中,但是我划横线的句子表现出了你一定的倾向性,你可以把这句改为(there has long been a discussion about the opinion that whether the internet could take the place of schools.)这样可以做到客观的引入话题,而不表明观点。

With time going by, Internet has become an encyclopedia in some degree. It seems that there are an increasing number of children are fund of getting information from the Internet. Some of them are in a great need of gaining information while others just surf it as a hobby. As is known to all that encyclopedia is large enough to satisfy those little children and of course the knowledge in textbooks is included. In that case, there is no need to employ teachers to teach children. As a result children can study just as well at home and get a good grade.

However, there are certainly demerits in studying at home with the Internet. People who make the webpages can make mistakes and some knowledge is completely wrong. As a child, it is not an easy job to distinguish the information. Unlike at home, children are able to obtain knowledge in a systematic way. Besides, children who study at home are more withdrawn than those who study at schools. What is more, children don’t require teachers and that means people who now are teachers will lose their jobs. It may cause the dissipation of human resources and their families are in great trouble of making a living.

上面一段有两个问题:

1.负面的问题我觉得分析的不够,错误应该只是一个小的方面,更重要的应该是:没有人引导,孩子的学习效率会比较低下。

2.我读了划横线的句子后,感觉你的观点应该是支持网络替代学校,因为你用了,certainly这个让步词,但是你在下面一段却表明了跟我的猜测相反的观点,前后不一致,这个是致命的错误。

My view is that schools are still necessary in the future. That is the best way for children to not only get their knowledge in a systematic way but also develop their interpersonal skills. Internet is, in the long run , just a tool to widen their horizons.

如果我打分的话,Band 5

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