雅思作文想拿高分 表格题磨练解析

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分 表格题磨练解析，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同， 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准， 你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.


In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据， 缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看， 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文常见题型 表格题磨练解析

表格题也是雅思作文中的常见题型，反复重现，磨练好表格题的作文技巧相当重要，筒子们来通过下面这篇范文，好好揣摩吧。

2008年6月5日

You should spend 20 minutes on this task.

The table below shows the cost of water in five Australian cities in 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

City Usage charge per kilolitre

(up to 125kl) Usage charge per kilolitre

(over 125kl) Water bill per household

Adelaide $0.42 $1.0 $310

Bri*ane $0.78 $0.78 $312

Melbourne $0.84 $0.84 $253

Perth $0.42 $1.5 $332

Sydney $0.98 $0.98 $319

Sample Answer:

The figure gives the information about how the water cost in five cities of Australia Year 2004 is compared. (这不仅仅是单纯的对题目文字的改写，更重要的是暗示考官“我已经充分读懂了题目，下面要把表格阐述的尽善尽美。”)

Specifically,(这是一个信号，标志着整篇文章采取“总分”的形式。考官很容易理解你的思路，并且站在你的角度去考虑问题) in 2004, water bill each household, the least of all items, (不要小看这个插入语，它可以让你的句式更为活泼，逻辑更为严谨，增加强调的意味，体现出你的语言水平)was 253 dollars in Melbourne, where the usage charge per kiloliter was 0.84 dollars, whether the total of water use was up to 125 kiloliter or over. The similar pattern was found in usage charge per kiloliter in Sydney and Bri*ane, 0.98 dollars and 0.78 dollars respectively.(我还想向考生推荐这个词。在众多的数字和表格项面前，纵然你能够始终保持清醒，但是你不能保证你啰嗦的描述让考官一直把你的文章看完。用一下这个词，众多的数字可以放在一起，用一个简洁的句型一目了然。) By contrast,(它的意思是“对照、对比”。后面的内容与前面的内容具有相同的量级，但是具有不同的方向。) that of Adelaide, 0.42 dollars, was the same as that of Perth when the total is no more than 125 kiloliters, but once the total was beyond the limit, both increased to 1.0 and 1.5 dollars individually. The water bill per family in Perth, the top, was 332 dollars, but that in other three cities was nearly 310 dollars.

All in all, in many parts of Australia the water charge per kiloliter depends on the total of water use, while the pattern is not in Bri*ane, Melbourne and Sydney. And there is a big difference in (这是一个总结，与开头相呼应告诉考官你的英文功底是扎实的，不会写虎头蛇尾的文章)water cost per family in the five cities.

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