让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 杨承松谈雅思作文

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 杨承松谈雅思作文，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议

　　中国烤鸭在雅思写作中，极爱用长难句，自己感觉一写长难句就会高大上，但其实不然。本文中新东方雅思网将为大家提出一些让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的建议，供大家参考。

建议一：避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。

比如：When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：

Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换

例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

建议二：避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复，但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改为：

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表达方式为：

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换

例如：My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly，显得更为简洁：

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

建议三：选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要，但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则：

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如：The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来分析，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是situation，谓语动词是was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念，可以改为下面这句话：

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构

例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为：

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为：

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如：Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表达方式为：

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态。

例如：In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”，而使用了被动语态後，彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一些：

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语，

例如：My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达，即loiter：

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达

例如：Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子：

Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

杨承松谈雅思作文

　　有人把翻译比作是带着镣铐在跳舞，镣铐是指原文的束缚，是说译者必须忍受原文的折磨，苦苦推敲，追求在原文基础上的美的最大化，未免把原文比喻得太不人道，而把翻译的过程说得也太过凄惨。可是为了把雅思写作说得苦点，我还准备借用这个比喻。

　　雅思作文的结构其实是外国小孩子初学写作就知道了的事，第一段写introduction, 下来是主体段落，所谓body paragraphs, 主体段落每一段的第一句话是topic sentence, 最后是conclusion。还有形形*的雅思写作模板，是根据不同的题型分类，在三段式的基础上的延伸。三段式十分老土，但也十分经典，非常清楚，便于下笔。好像装修房子，其实越简单的东西就越耐看；也好像找老婆，越是把脸蛋搞得复杂的，越是难以把握。雅思作文的写作模板，有些同学喜欢背诵，也是可以的，但一定要会变通。如果我们把雅思作文的结构和模板比作镣铐，其实也是合理的，因为作文如同做人，从来是没有百分之百的自由的。同样是三段式，有人写的文章不忍卒读，而罗素写的What I Have Lived for竟然成了名篇。可见文章向来是比文字和思想的，因为罗素写的文章的结构和小学生写的文章结构是没办法比出高下的。镣铐是戴了，下来就看你舞得如何了，有人要跳国标，有人要跳探戈，有人要Jazz，有人要贴面，这就是差异，文如其人嘛。比如我写作，是属于比较贾岛的那种，用词喜欢精雕细琢，老想让人看得心惊肉跳（而我蹦迪，只有一个动作，一只手在空中来回比划，像是指着一个仇人的鼻梁在骂，又像在告诉学生选择题的正确答案），或许这就是文风吧。但是基本上雅思作文是属于比较国标的，因为作为一种controlled writing（规定式作文），它测试的是利用语言生存的能力，像你能不能在吃了一顿后悔饭后写封信给那个该死的餐馆发发牢骚，或者能不能描述一下阅读过程中碰到的一个图表，或者能不能就北大才子在长安街头*肉这样的事发一通议论，所以它不是看你舞得多花骚，甩没甩头发，扭没扭*，老老实实搓三步搓四步才是正经。但是跳一种保险的舞蹈并不是说你的舞蹈就可以没有看点，要得高分，还得有些亮点，还要能听到一些掌声。同学们千万不要让僵硬的模板窒息了自己的创造性。2003年9月20日的大作文，是问你同意不同意妇女参军的Agree or Disagree题型。这类作文第一段第一句背景交待，下来是说一些人认为如何如何另一些人认为如何如何，然后我同意前者/后者，我认为如何如何，再来一个for the following reasons。这样的模板是两刃剑。我当时给同学们是这样写的：

　　The war on Iraq which broke out early this year witnessed the controversial roles woman soldiers played in a modern war. Yet, while some countries encourage women to wear military uniforms, others discourage this vulnerable sex from becoming armed monsters. To be frank, I am a traditional man who always associates women with feeding bottles, needles and cooking utensils while men with swords and gunpowder.

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