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雅思考官如何批改雅思作文的 如何使你的雅思作文句型富有变化(上)

雅思考官如何批改雅思作文的

雅思作文这样批,你懂的---系列一

在执教雅思写作的这些年中,我会发现,很多时候学生会从某某老师那里获取种种所谓的“黄金模板”,又或者是高举考前必备一本,视若雅思界的圣经。而不去管什么“碰文”。而最最难过的却是分数不给力,换个方式学吧,看看隔壁的“他”的作文中那些错误的背后是否隐藏了写作的某些玄机。

请看下面这个小作文的开头段,看似行文流水,实则欲哭无泪。

As can be seen from the table chart, it gives us the percentage of national consumer experience by category in 2002 in five different countries.谈及套句,小作文中“As can be seen from…”曾被列为小作文必备佳句,而孰不知此句虽好,但native speaker 常把它放在主体段落开头句。若论行文习惯,实在勉强。再者,“table chart”必会让考官在批卷的疲劳中会心一笑。但是烤鸭们,不知啊,你让他笑,他却让你人比黄花瘦,尽管他是那样的爱你。此短语翻译成中文叫“表格图”,考生自是觉得挺有中国风的感觉。但考官会认为是“这table就是表格,也就是图的一种,还后面要是再加一chart,再来一图。实为“black sheep 一族”啊!南部陈更要翻译成“表格图图”?实在是具有喜感啊!再论“us”一词,感觉倒是亲民派系, 考官考生一家人啊。但是,雅思写作,半学术文体,这词总有点较为随意。所以,宁为被动,隐去施动者,换成it can be seen ,或是it represents that 等句,或许会更好点。考生最无辜的地方就是下面的这个percentage。我们都知道,衣服表格不可能只有全图一个数据,又怎会遗忘名词单复数的问题呢?最后那个“in 2002 in five different countries”,感觉起来好似是信息满满,不知道是否也是信心满满?语法老师告诉我们:当句子中同时有地点状语和时间状语时,一般要把地点状语放在时间状语之前 。要知道,不走寻常路,那是考官的作风。考生要是也这样做,哭泣大于微笑。

基于上述段落的分析,不知道同学们是否也会有所收获?其实开头段,自是不必非得写的那叫一个倾国倾城。简单大方,信息全面,能够统领全文,那就最好。你,懂得了吗?

雅思作文这样批,你懂的---系列二

People have, in recent years, shown concern on the dire consequences of global warming and air pollution. Some people suggest that we should limit are travel (traveling) instead of car use. It seems to me that the objection against air travel is based on incorrect facts and stereotypes. (The) Vehicle is an integral segment of urban industrial civilization, mirroring contemporary life, in its best and unrest aspects.

如何使你的雅思作文句型富有变化(上)


  句式就是句子的结构方式,也就是句子的式样或格式。不同的思想内容要用不同的句式来表达;而同一思想内容也可以用不同的句式来表达。句式不同,表达效果也就不同。只有句式多样化,文章才会生动有趣,充满活力。可是,在实际写作中,初学写作的学生往往一篇文章都是千篇一律的简单句,文章单调乏味,毫无生气。笔者认为,恰当地使用某些方法或手段有助于实际表达形式的多样化,增强表达效果。兹将常用方法简单介绍如下。

  一、改变句子开头

  许多学生在写作中倾向于用与人有关系的词性,用名词和代词作为句子的开头,如 People,We,I,He,They,She等。但这种开头见多了,难免让人厌倦。试比较:

  A.People throughout the country have greatly demanded all kinds of nutritious food.

  B.There is a great demand across the country for all kinds of nutritious food.

  第一句改用非人称名词作为主语开头,第二句则用there +be句型开头。这样既改变了主语+谓语+宾语单调句型,又把想强调的意思突出出来。实际上,为了把文章写得生动活泼,除了用主语开头外,还可以用句子的其他成分开头。

  1.用副词开头

  Too often,students stray into the habit of cheating on tests.

  2.用同位语开头

  Air,water and oxygen,everything that is necessary for life.

  3.用状语开头

  Dark and empty,the house looked very different from the way I remembered it.

  4.用表语开头

  Equally essential to the highest success in learning a language are intense interest plus persistent effort.

  5.用宾语开头

  My advice you would not listen to;my helps you laughed at.Now you will have what you asked for.

  6.以短语修饰语开头

  1)以介词短语开头

  To me the news was very interesting,but to my wife very boring.

  2)以分词短语开头

  Disturbed by the discord of American life in recent decades,Menchester took flight for the pacific islands.

  3)以不定式短语开头

  To pass the exam,you should work very hard.
  二、巧用连接词

  有的学生在作文中使用过多简单句,成了简单句堆砌;有的写复杂句时,动辄用so, and,then,but,or,however,yet等非但达不到丰富表达方式的目的,反而使句子结构松散、呆板。为了避免这种现象,可以通过使用连接词,尤其是一些表示从属关系的连接词,如 who,which,that,because,since,although,after,as,before,when,whenever,if,unless,as if等,不仅能够丰富句型,而且还能够把思想表达得更清楚,意义更连贯。例如:

  Natural resources are very limited.They will be exhausted in the near future.It is not true.But it becomes a major concern around the world.This is a widely accepted fact.

  这段文字用简单句表达,它们之间内在的逻辑关系含糊不清,意思支离破碎。如果使用连接词,将单句与其前后合并,形成主次关系,就把一个比较复杂的内容和关系表达得层次清楚、结构严谨。例如:

  It is a widely accepted fact that there is a major concern around the world for the exhaustion of limited natural resources in the near future,though it is unlikely to be true.

  再如:

  The Mississippi River is one of the longest rivers in the world,and in spring time it often overflows its banks,and the lives of many people are endangered.

  此句用and把三个分句一贯到底,既乏味又可笑。如果使用了关系代词which,语义就会更连贯,语言也会更流畅:

  The Mississippi River,which is one of the longest rivers in the world,often overflows its banks in the spring time,endangering the lives of many people.

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