雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

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雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同，这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思(课程)考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准， 你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.



In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据， 缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看， 文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数：There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态：as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

大部分同学在复习雅思小作文中会出现这样那样的问题，由于中国的传统教育中对于图表类描写的练习涉及少，同学们不能熟练掌握写作手法。常有同学面对小作文的图表无从下手。下面，雅思小编为大家列举在雅思小作文写作过程中，99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

一般没有had a decrease/ increase的说法，一般是saw a decrease/increase

Increased, decreased, declined 这些上升和下降的词都没有被动语态

当the number, the amount, the figure， the proportion做句子的主语的时候，不能用account for

The proportion of 后面不能加句子，譬如说 the proportion of people worked in the healthcare sector是错的，要写成the proportion of people who worked in the healthcare sector

The amount不能替换the number

Ratio和rate一般不能替代proportion和percentage

Picture 不能替换graph 或者chart

不要用定语从句读数据，譬如说 the crime rate in the US was highest, which was 0.3%. 这里的which was 直接省略。

结尾段一般不写in conclusion

结尾段不能写数据

一般是compared with，而不是comparing with

Followed by后面要写名词，而且这个名词要和主句的主语性质差不多

Reach 读数据的时候不能加to或者at, 直接加数据就可以

说人年龄的时候应该是aged，譬如说people aged from 15 to 24

一般不会用过去进行时态，也就是was increasing/decreasing 是错的

While, whereas一定要连接两个独立的句子，不能够单独存在

副词slightly不能修饰名词，应该是slight increase, drop

小作文一般用不到minimum这个词，minimal的意思不是“最小的”，而是“基本上可以忽略不计的”

尽量不要用套句，如果用，要注意不要写错，it is worth noting that, it should be noted that

图表作文一般用不到on the contrary, 用in contrast, by contrast即可

表示波动可以说fluctuated，不要写saw a fluctuation

Reduce和raise这两个词小作文用不到，因为是及物动词;arise也不能替代rise;“ascent/descent”不能用在小作文里。

remained 后面只能加形容词，也就是“remain constantly”是错的，只有“remain constant”

在动态图里，一般是rose “数字”-fold，譬如说是”rose fivefold”而不是“rose five times”

Doubled(增长一倍)不及物动词，没有被动

“outnumber”的主语一般是可数名词的复数，不能是不可数名词;表示超过的时候，一般是用overtake/surpass

“millions” 或者“thousands”在句子中出现时不能加复数，只有“数字+million or thousand”的说法

动态图过分注重数据和小的波动，而忽视趋势。所谓趋势，就是一个区间内最主要的一个变化(譬如说，如果大部分时候是上升，就是上升趋势)

静态图过分侧重读数据，没有将数据归类和归纳(具备类似特征的数据要放在一起)

图表作文最好不要出现in addition, moreover这些连接词

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