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一般情况下,烤鸭们会很顺利地读懂自己写的雅思(微博)作文,但是却不知道,身为“老外”的雅思考官是否能读出同样的味道。这主要是因为汉语和英语在表达顺序上的差异。

首先我们先看几个短句,来体会这种语言差异:

例1:Chatting on the Internet provides us with a lot of fun.

网上聊天给我带来很多乐趣。

汉语:网上 聊天

英语:聊天 在网上

可见,英语习惯性地将修饰成分后置,尤其是短语结构的修饰语。

更多例子:

Self-confidence is the first step on the road to success.

自信是成功之路的第一步。

汉语:成功之路 的第一步

英语:第一步 在路上 成功的

Living without an aim is like sailing without a compass.

没有目标的活着就像没有罗盘的航行。

汉语: 没有目标地 活着

英语:活着 没有目标

汉语:没有罗盘的 航行

英语:航行 没有罗盘

看了以上的例子我们不难发现英语和汉语在修饰方面的差异,下面让我们练习翻译几个句子,进一步体会写作过程中如何利用这样规律:

练习1: 一提到即将开始的学校生活,许多学生都会兴高采烈。

step1:找句子的主干(表达的核心内容)——学生都会兴高采烈numerous students will go to rapture

step2:找修饰成分——生活life——学校生活school life——即将开始的学校生活 the coming school life

考虑到修饰位置的平衡我们将the coming school life调整为the coming life of school, 修饰的核心词是life,前后都有修饰语,结构上比较平衡,避免修饰语过多而造成chinglish。

step3:整理——Numerous students will go to rapture at the mere mention of the coming life of school.

注意:英语习惯将重要信息前置,所以一般先写句子主干,在写其他修成成分。这样你的表达和老外的理解就很容易契合。

练习2: 考虑到问题的严重性,在事态进一步恶化之前,必须采取有效的措施。

step1:找主干——必须采取有效的措施:effective measures should be taken(由于无明确主语所以选择被动形式)

step2: 找修饰语——(1)考虑到问题的严重性in view of the seriousness of this problem

(2)在事态进一步恶化之前(时间状语)before things get worse

step3:整理In view of the seriousness of this problem ,effective measures should be taken before things get worse.

注意:此处,修饰成分没有全部放到句子后面,而是分为两个部分一个放前一个放后,这是考虑句子平衡的结果。

不知道同学们是否有了一些启发。同时希望愤怒的烤鸭们能尽快拿到自己的理想成绩。

雅思作文修改:new language should be invented

题目:Some people think that a new language should be invented for people from different countries to use for the international communication. To what extent do you think its advantages far outweigh its disadvantages?

其实这篇并不怪啊,就相当于我发的讲义的重点题目第一题,一种全球化的语言。

In the contemporary world, globalization is making a large incidence around the world. The issue of invented a fresh language is an emotional one, with some people talking the attitude that is necessary to contrive a new language for people from different countries to use for the international communication.

The reason for this trend may involve the recognition that different language may cause dispensable trouble, even lead to a war and also restricted people who can only use their mother tongue to communicate with external people. By contrast, those who can use foreign language to get a high-paid career and immigrate to other countries have a high quality life. They tend to be more enlighten may to they broader view. Admittedly, having ability to communicate with people who has different culture background is increasingly remarkable. So, invented a new language may bring numerous benefits to not only a person, but countries from all over the world.

第一个立论段落的问题:主题句涵盖太多内容,太宽泛,变成几乎没有主题句

However, a great language frequently link to a variety of culture. Furthermore, originate a new language is a long-term evolution like Chinese. Classical Chinese is the beginning of Chinese which is throughout 5000 years of history and gradually evolve to modern language called Modern Vernacular Chinese. During that time, Chinese shaped a colorful culture which is magnificent at present. But, current science and technology is become increasing advancing. Scientist may totally create a new language which is combine diversity of culture.

这段的论述有点离题了

Overall, despite of creating a language may during a long-term period. But, modern technology can reduce that period and eventually contrive a new language. Speaking myself, its benefits are significant contributing factors to the development of world.

给你一点论据:

支持:

1. 个人生活,学习,工作带来方便

2. 促进世界的经济发展,国与国的沟通,社会进步

不支持:

1. 造成很多小语种和少数民族文化的消失

2. 造成世界的uniformity,使人们的生活变的dull或monotonous

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