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雅思作文想拿高分 雅思作文越复杂越好

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯!

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题,有时候觉得自己写得很不错,但是得分却很低,本文中,新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同, 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.



In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和 long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数: There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态: as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文越复杂越好?中国学生常见的四大误区

1. 误解一:句子结构越复杂,得分越高

许多考生在考雅思写作的时候,拼了命的把准备的各种句型拐弯抹角地套在一起,窃以为考官在阅卷的时候必会为自己强大的语法功底所折服,进而给个六分。可是,雅思作文考试毕竟不是语法考试。一篇好雅思文章应该流畅自然,而不是生搬硬套,无中生有。这种费尽心机写下的“高分”句子往往会弄巧成拙,影响文章整体的自然性和流畅性。

2. 误解二:使用的单词越生僻,得分越高

有些考生在学到雅思写作要换词后,每次练习写作都不惜花大把时间把简洁的词汇Google成百年难得一遇的生僻词,然后死死记下,当作替换词用到考试中,以博考官注意,达到画龙点睛之效,然而结果却往往事与愿违。其实,单词不求复杂,要的是贴切。像是经济学人上的学术性文章上,也常会用到cut来描述价格、经费上的消减。这不但不会让人觉的低俗幼稚,反而能让人觉得干脆利落,毫不留情。而且,用复杂的单词极易拼写错,更让考官对之反感。同时,Google来的甚至是字典上的单词往往会翻译得不准确,一旦使用就会闹出笑话。例如褒词贬用,贬词褒用,让考官完全抓不准考生的观点和立场,影响得分。单词的恰当使用时一个学习积累的过程,如果没有足够的把握,务必慎用。

3. 误解三:写作文要加标题

英国考试有一个惯例,写作文时不需要加标题,直接写正文就行。加标题纯属画蛇添足,而且这个标题有时可能涵盖太大,整篇文章都不能很好的驾驭这个标题;有的时候又可能包含太少,一个标题只覆盖文中一两段的内容;有时甚至标题的意思与文章主题南辕北辙,各奔东西误导考官。所以写雅思作文时,切忌加标题。

4. 误解四:小作文每条数据都要描写

雅思官方有明确指出,大作文占的分量要比小作文大,而且考官在评分改卷时也以大作文为主。但有时考生在写作文时,把握不住时间,小作文写得过于详细,最后留给大作文的时间还不足半小时,这样就基本over了。而小作文写得久,就是因为很多考生都在千方百计地把图中出现的所有数据写入小作文中。最后,不但小作文的流畅自然被破坏,留给大作文的写作时间也所剩无几,进退维谷。其实,小作文的数据并不需要全数描写,这不单是为了节约时间给大作文,更是为了保障小作文的浑然天成,避免出现流水账的情况,以给小作文加分。

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