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雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文审题方法

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雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文审题方法

雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯


大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同,这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数:There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态:as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文审题方法

雅思写作过程中审题是非常重要的一关,只有大家在审题的时候掌握的雅思写作题目的真正含义,才能在接下来的写作中发挥自己的实力。下面为大家介绍一个雅思写作审题方法,就是从不同的角度来分析。

雅思作文跟国内写作一样都是话题作文,在紧张的时间里抓住题目思想进行立意是关键,雅思写作和国内的写作不同之处在于:

一、考题范围广并多涉及负面问题。

雅思考试的作文涉及教育、科技、犯罪、媒体、*等各个方面。这是由英国的教育方式决定的。国外多是小班教学,以讨论课为主。学生围绕一个topic,进行辩论、相互驳斥,以此锻炼学生的语言和思维能力。

例如:关于交通警察是否可以配枪的话题。这个问题反映了现实意义:当时的伦敦和柏林等地区有多处骚乱,而这个问题英国议会真的有辩论过。这就要求我们考生要关注国际环境,培养自己的国际视野。

二、重辩论能力。

雅思考试是国际性的考试,主要考察考生独立思考的能力,提倡提出质疑,只要能自圆其说就可以。这与中国传统的中庸之道完全不同。但是考生在提出自己的观点时要在理性判断的基础上,也不需要政治腔。如02年考题——是否应该废除死刑。不管哪种都要以站得住脚的论证和角度来分析。建议就这个题,最好应和国际走势选择反对死刑,这也是所谓的国际视野。

在审题后,如何揣测立意呢?

大家可以从不同的角度进行分析,比如:

E是economy environment经济和环境角度。

I是individual intelligence个人和智力角度。

G是government *角度。

H是human rights health人权和健康角度。

T分别是tradition time传统和时间角度。

S是society社会角度。

考生不妨在雅思写作时,运用这种快速好记的方法,迅速找到适当的角度为你的观点做阐释。例如,死刑的问题,同意不废除的可以从人权、社会、个人(受害者家庭、罪犯)等角度来论证,这样就能全面、系统的列出证词,自圆其说。

特别提醒考生:写作观点的选择一定要有清晰的界定,只能二选一。但是并不一定要尖锐而生硬。还以“死刑”为例,如果支持废除,文章最后也可以指出从长远看应该废除死刑,但是目前一些发展中国家的现状还不能废除。在观点解释清楚后,这是“有条件”的支持论点,反而更显圆满。

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