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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 雅思作文99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 雅思作文99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议

  中国烤鸭在雅思写作中,极爱用长难句,自己感觉一写长难句就会高大上,但其实不然。本文中新东方雅思网将为大家提出一些让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的建议,供大家参考。

建议一:避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息,完全可以被删掉。

比如:When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换

例如:Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

建议二:避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表达方式为:

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换

例如:My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如:The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构

例如下面的句子:There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为:

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为:

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如:Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表达方式为:

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。

例如:In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态後,彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,

例如:My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达

例如:Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

雅思作文99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

大部分同学在复习雅思小作文中会出现这样那样的问题,由于中国的传统教育中对于图表类描写的练习涉及少,同学们不能熟练掌握写作手法。常有同学面对小作文的图表无从下手。下面,雅思小编为大家列举在雅思小作文写作过程中,99%的学生都会犯的问题有哪些

一般没有had a decrease/ increase的说法,一般是saw a decrease/increase

Increased, decreased, declined 这些上升和下降的词都没有被动语态

当the number, the amount, the figure, the proportion做句子的主语的时候,不能用account for

The proportion of 后面不能加句子,譬如说 the proportion of people worked in the healthcare sector是错的,要写成the proportion of people who worked in the healthcare sector

The amount不能替换the number

Ratio和rate一般不能替代proportion和percentage

Picture 不能替换graph 或者chart

不要用定语从句读数据,譬如说 the crime rate in the US was highest, which was 0.3%. 这里的which was 直接省略。

结尾段一般不写in conclusion

结尾段不能写数据

一般是compared with,而不是comparing with

Followed by后面要写名词,而且这个名词要和主句的主语性质差不多

Reach 读数据的时候不能加to或者at, 直接加数据就可以

说人年龄的时候应该是aged,譬如说people aged from 15 to 24

一般不会用过去进行时态,也就是was increasing/decreasing 是错的

While, whereas一定要连接两个独立的句子,不能够单独存在

副词slightly不能修饰名词,应该是slight increase, drop

小作文一般用不到minimum这个词,minimal的意思不是“最小的”,而是“基本上可以忽略不计的”

尽量不要用套句,如果用,要注意不要写错,it is worth noting that, it should be noted that

图表作文一般用不到on the contrary, 用in contrast, by contrast即可

表示波动可以说fluctuated,不要写saw a fluctuation

Reduce和raise这两个词小作文用不到,因为是及物动词;arise也不能替代rise;“ascent/descent”不能用在小作文里。

remained 后面只能加形容词,也就是“remain constantly”是错的,只有“remain constant”

在动态图里,一般是rose “数字”-fold,譬如说是”rose fivefold”而不是“rose five times”

Doubled(增长一倍)不及物动词,没有被动

“outnumber”的主语一般是可数名词的复数,不能是不可数名词;表示超过的时候,一般是用overtake/surpass

“millions” 或者“thousands”在句子中出现时不能加复数,只有“数字+million or thousand”的说法

动态图过分注重数据和小的波动,而忽视趋势。所谓趋势,就是一个区间内最主要的一个变化(譬如说,如果大部分时候是上升,就是上升趋势)

静态图过分侧重读数据,没有将数据归类和归纳(具备类似特征的数据要放在一起)

图表作文最好不要出现in addition, moreover这些连接词

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