雅思作文想拿高分雅思作文：Task1满分标准解读

更新：2023年04月03日 16:18 雅思无忧

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雅思作文想拿高分雅思作文：Task1满分标准解读

雅思作文想拿高分这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同，这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准，你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people，但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据，缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看，文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看，文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢，我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文：Task1满分标准解读

　　雅思小作文满分标准要点 1 ---- Task Achievement

　　1.fully satisfies all the requirements of the task

　　标准解读：

　　考生在写作时首先要仔细阅读题干，读懂题目要求。小作文标题一般分两句话，第一句话介绍图表内容，第二句话提出要求。一般要求都是：Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 也就是说，写作时要做到两点：选择并总结出表格的主要特征，同时进行适当的比较分析。考生如果只是列出一些图表信息，而不进行适当分析的话，则无法获得高分。

　　2. clearly presents a fully developed response

　　标准解读：

　　(1)完整、有逻辑地谋篇布局。

　　(2)写作目的清晰。

　　(3)主要内容完整、切题、正确、有理有据: 考生要能自然地展开论述，善始善终地表达观点、陈述事实。所举论据能很好的支持论点。

　　雅思小作文满分标准要点 2 ---- Coherence and Cohesion

　　1. uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention

　　标准解读：

　　好文章的最高境界就是：“连贯得让人没有感觉”。也就是说不刻意用连接词，不滥用模板句和过渡句, 而做到句与句之间逻辑清晰，语意连贯，连接词和短语的运用信手拈来，整个文章浑然一体。

　　文章的连贯要注意以下几个问题：

　　(1)段落衔接自然。

　　(2)论证时注意思路清晰，过渡自然。好文章是由思想编织的。

　　(3)适当运用连接词。对于雅思小作文写作来说，使用连接词的目的是为了更强大的逻辑引导和语气强调。

　　2. skillfully manages paragraphing

　　标准解读：

　　熟练运用分段技巧,在进行段落划分时要注意以下几个问题：

　　(1)根据文章脉络划分自然段

　　(2)段落衔接自然

　　(3)每段主旨和要点明确

　　雅思小作文满分标准要点 3 ---- Lexical resource

　　Uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features; rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’.

　　标准解读：

　　用词要多样、精确、自然、有风格。个别小错误在所难免。

　　1.多样：体现出多变的用词。考生不仅仅要会用最基础的词汇，同时要能体现出运用高端书面词汇的能力。另外，考生还应注意变换地运用同义词，而不是重复同一个词。这一点对于雅思小作文写作尤为重要，例如考生在描述一条曲线的趋势时，经常会反复表达上升、下降、最高点、最低点等意义，这就需要考生在日常的学习过程中，多注重相关词汇的积累。

　　2.精确：所用词在句中语意连贯正确，词性准确，感*彩贴切，用法地道，拼写无误。

　　3.自然：灵活用词，不刻意堆砌辞藻，用词恰到好处，为文章的表意而服务。

　　4.有风格：对于雅思小作文而言，考生在写作时应保持客观严谨的写作风格。

　　5.小错误：满分文章也并非一点错误都没有。写作时不要为了刻意追求完美而影响了表意和流利度。

　　雅思小作文满分标准要点 4 ---- Grammatical range and accuracy

　　Uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

　　标准解读：

　　1.Wide range of structures：要体现出能运用各种句式结构的能力，包括简单句、各类从句、分词短语、并列句等等。

　　2.Flexibility：灵活运用各类句型。文章长短句交错，每句话的形式结构恰到好处，为合理传递信息表达思想而服务。

　　3.Accuracy：尽量避免语法错误，包括时态、语态、句式、标点的错误等。

　　4.Rare minor errors：满分作文也并非要完全避免语法错误。考生在写作时应在清晰表达思路的前提下，尽量注意语法问题。

　　以上就是雅思小作文满分标准的相关介绍，考生朋友在平时练习中应该尽量满足，最后祝大家都能考出好成绩。