让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 雅思作文十大失分点

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 雅思作文十大失分点，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议

　　中国烤鸭在雅思写作中，极爱用长难句，自己感觉一写长难句就会高大上，但其实不然。本文中新东方雅思网将为大家提出一些让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的建议，供大家参考。

建议一：避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。

比如：When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：

Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换

例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

建议二：避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复，但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改为：

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表达方式为：

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换

例如：My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly，显得更为简洁：

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

建议三：选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要，但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则：

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如：The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来分析，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是situation，谓语动词是was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念，可以改为下面这句话：

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构

例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为：

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为：

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如：Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表达方式为：

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态。

例如：In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”，而使用了被动语态後，彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一些：

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语，

例如：My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达，即loiter：

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达

例如：Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子：

Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

雅思作文十大失分点

前言 每年都有数以万计的同学为雅思作文呕心沥血而成效不佳。来看看雅思作文中你都犯了什么忌吧。 大部分中国考生在写雅思议论文时的失分点实在可惜，因此，专家总结和归纳了目前考生在写议论中的十大失分点，希望考生们在备考时予以重视。 一、不一致 所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，还包括了数的不一致、时态不一致以及代词不一致等。 比如：When one have money, he can do what he want to. 分析：one是第三人称单数，因此本句的have应改为has; want应改为wants, 本句是典型的主谓不一致。 改为：When one has money, he can do what he wants (to do). 二、修饰语错位 英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子的含义可能引起变化。对于这一点考生们往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解。 比如： I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus. 分析：better位置不当，应置于句末。 三、句子不完整 在口语中，交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是书面语就不同了，句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常在主句写完以后，作者又想加些补充说明时发生。 比如：There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on. 分析：本句后半部分"For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句。 改为：There are many ways to know society, for example, by TV, radio, and newspaper. 四、悬垂修饰语 所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清。 比如：At the age of ten, my grandfather died. 这句中"at the age of ten"只写出十岁时，但没有说明“谁”十岁时，按一般推理不可能是my grandfather, 如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改得明确一点，读者或考官在读句子时就不会误解了。 改为：When I was ten, my grandfather died. 五、词性误用 “词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等。 比如：None can negative the importance of money. 分析：negative系形容词，误作动词。 改为：None can deny the importance of money. 六、指代不清 指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清，或者先后所用的代词不一致。 比如：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bride*aid. 读完上面这一句话，读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚，谁将当伴娘。 如果我们把易于引起误解的代词所指代的对象加以明确，意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bride*aid. 七、不间断句子 这个错误的出现受中文意识的影响很大。很多考生在写句子时，句子之间缺乏有效的连接成分。甚至，有的句子写的比较中式化。 比如：There are many ways we get to know the outside world. 分析：这个句子包含了两层完整的意思：“there are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了 改为：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或：There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world. 八、措词毛病 学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲，斟酌句子中所选用词的习惯。大部分考生随心所欲，拿来就用，所以作文中用词不当的错误随处可见。 比如：The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution. 分析：显然，考生把obstacles“障碍”，“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use(不断增加的使用)”应改为“abusive use(滥用)”。 改为：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution. 九、累赘 写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。 比如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句 我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him. 比如：For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need. 整个句子可以大大简化为：Diligent people use money only to buy what they need. 十、不连贯 不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通，这也是考生常犯的毛病。 比如：The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth. 分析：the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯，it与things在数方面不一致。 希望2021的学弟学妹们也能考出理想成绩！加油吧！

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