雅思作文想拿高分 名师解答：为什么你的雅思作文不到六分

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分 名师解答：为什么你的雅思作文不到六分，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同， 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准， 你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据， 缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看， 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

名师解答：为什么你的雅思作文不到六分

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同学:

你好!

你在博客评论中说考了两次雅思, 作文都没有到达6分. 而你阅读了不少雅思写作参考书, 你自己也肯定你的结构和参考书上是一致的. 你自己已经回答了你的问题.

你问我为什么你没有考到6分. 参考书可能就是一个致命的原因. 你阅读的参考书有问题. 我没有阅读你说的写作参考书, 所以不对参考书进行评价. 但是根据我的教学经验, 你是读错了书籍. 这好比你发烧了, 就自己随便吃药. 虽然你吃的药物名字也是退烧的, 但是导致发烧的原因太多, 每个药物针对性有限.

写作不能靠着阅读参考书提高, 否则的话我早出版写作书籍了. 出版书籍可以赚钱, 扬名, 但是教学十年多, 为什么我不出书呢? 就是我认为写作参考书实际上更多的是商业而非学术. 北大清华北外南大等等高校内英文高手如云, 随便拉出来几个教授, 水平都比任何培训机构的所谓金牌名师要高出很多, 但是这些教授为什么不出版写作书籍呢? 道理很简单, 大家都知道, 写作不能靠着一本参考书来解决, 而且参考书在很多情况下是有害的.

我不能只告诉你参考书有害, 我还要告诉你什么是有好处的.

我想请你思考以下几个问题:

1. 雅思在过去的三年内都考了什么题目?

2. 这些考题有什么共同特征?

3. 虽然题目每次都有变化, 这些变化背后不变的测试点究竟是什么?

4. 你是否知道要考核你什么语言技能?

5. 针对要考的语言技能, 你做出怎样的应对?

请你思考这些问题, 然后请你大量阅读英文原版的论文, 而不是参考书. 比较容易获得的英文原版论文有TOEFL的阅读理解, GRE 阅读理解, 当然GMAT也不错, 如果这些文章, 你拿出来认真分析十篇, 我想你怎么也不会考不到6分.

说实在的, 雅思作文9分也不过是一种短期训练可以达到的游戏而已. 我没有更多认真研究你的具体问题, 给你提出的解决方案比较笼统, 希望你自己多思多问.

祝你进步

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