雅思作文点评：老龄化快速增长的优缺点 雅思作文技巧：虚拟语气

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雅思作文点评：老龄化快速增长的优缺点

In many countries, the number of elderly people is increasing fast. To what extent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

Nowadays, owning to the improvement of living condition(这里习惯用复数), people can live much longer than before, which gives rise to the fast increasing number of elderly people. Some hold that this situation will result in a series of problems, such as social burden, population expansion and so on. While others insist that it agrees the development of modern society and brings many advantages. For my part, I take the latter side with(用for) the following reasons: (74words)

点评：开头稍微写的有点长，不过内容写的还不错。属于通过分析两种不同观点，最后阐述自己观点的写法。(此种写法在雅思大作文的第一段比较常见)

美中不足的是倒数第二句的错误比较明显!while是个连词，应该连接句子与句子，所以这里前面不应该是句号。后面agree是不及物动词，不能直接加宾语。

Firstly, elder people(一会儿elderly people,一会儿又elder people，这不是自相矛盾么!!!) are the fortune of our society. They have enough experiences and capabilities which are badly lacked and needed for our youth when dealing with all sorts of problems, they can still do well in their jobs. Especially(前面应该用逗号，然后这里小写) in some professions, such as teacher, doctor, scientist and so on, sometimes (前面应该用句号，然后这里大写)age means the authority and ability. When you see a doctor, do you prefer an elderly doctor with grey hair or a youth without mustache? (77words)

Secondly, elder people(同上) are the happiness of our society. Increasing number of elderly people is also the embodiment of our improving living quality, which shows our society run(应该第三人称单数)to the right and healthy direction, we(前面句号，这里大写) have more chance and time to serve our elderly people, and it’s the happiest time of all our life to accompany with(accompany是及物动词) our parents, grandparents and great grandparents. (63words)

Finally, elderly people are the lubricant of our society. They have good temper and enough patients(应该是patience吧) to do anything, they can help us to intercede(它是不及物动词，而且主要用人作宾语) social disputes, and they make our society much more harmonious which(前面最好有个逗号)makes for the construction of harmonious society.(43words)

正文段综合点评：此篇是典型的5段式作文的写作，正文段构思出三个分论点来证明自己的观点，的确在构思上花了不少心思。但是，这里我想提的是，还是两方面都分析一下会比较好一点。特别这篇文章是问优点多还是缺点多，那么最好是缺点讲一个，然后优点再讲两个。外国人喜欢这样的辩证分析。

其次，总的来说，作者的语言还是挺流畅的。但是似乎标点有问题，该用句号的时候用逗号，改用逗号的时候用句号，这个也要扣分的!

From mentioned above, the advantages of increasing number of elderly people are obvious more than it disadvantages(典型的Chinese English.应该说there are obviously more advantages than disadvantages.). Elderly people are not the burden of our society but the source of fortune, happiness and harmony of our society.(37words)

全文总评：

尽管总的来说语言水平还是很不错的，内容也写得很充实，但缺点是语言方面还是不够细腻。此文7分。

雅思作文技巧：虚拟语气

　　哪些雅思作文技巧可以帮助考生有效提高雅思写作的水平呢?雅思作文技巧是非常繁多的，而虚拟语气就是其中一个非常基础，同时非常加分的细节雅思写作技巧，小编也总结了一下雅思写作技巧中虚拟语气的用法，目前正在积极备战雅思作文考试的同学们不妨加以参考。
　　在雅思写作中会经常用到的几个雅思写作虚拟语气句型。
　　1.If * had done sth(坏事), * would never have done sth(好事).
　　如果某人过去做了某事(坏事)，那么他永远不可能做某事
　　If Hugh Miller, after toiling all day in quarry (采石场), had devoted his evenings to rest and recreation, he would never have become a famous geologist.
　　2.Sb would never have done sth(好事1) , never have done sth (好事2), if * had done sth (坏事)
　　某人永远不可能做某事， 永远不可能做某事， 如果某人过去做了某件坏事
　　The celebrated mathematician, Edmund Stone, would never have published a mathematical dictionary, never have found the key to science of mathematics, if he had given his spare moments to idleness.
　　3.Had * done sth(坏事) ， * would never have done sth (好事)
　　如果某人过去做了某件坏事，而不是去做某件好事，那么他永远不可能做某事(好事)
　　Had the little Scotch lad, Ferguson, allowed the busy brain to go to sleep while he tended sheep on the hillside, instead of calculating the position of the stars by a string of beads, he would never have become a famous astronomer.
　　对以上几个虚拟语气的应用范文
　　Group discussion Google
　　If Google had ignored the importance of group discussion, this high-tech company would never have achieved today's stunning success.
　　(If * had done sth, he would never have done sth)
　　Google, a once obscure, ailing / fragile company, would never have achieved today's stunning success, never have conquered so big a market share, if it had ignored the importance of group discussion.
　　(* would never have done sth , never have done sth , if * had done sth)
　　Had Google , a once *all , obscure company , ignored the importance of group discussion ，the hi-tech tycoon would never , never have harvested today's overwhelming success . (压倒性的成功)
　　以上就是小编整理的虚拟语气的雅思作文技巧总结，考生们可以根据以上给出件建议，并通过针对性的练习来逐步掌握雅思写作技巧，从而在雅思作文考试中取得更好的成绩。

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