雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文如何结尾

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数：There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态：as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文如何结尾？常用写作黄金总结句盘点

在复习雅思过程中同学们可以适当总结雅思写作中常用句型，比如小编下面汇总的万用总结句，在不同的题目中可以将这些作为骨架，加入具体细节性内容，这样快速写出一篇中规中矩的雅思作文。也可以积累下列句型，加入一些特殊词汇为自己的写作增加色彩。

雅思写作黄金总结句之1.表示原因

1)There are three reasons for this.

2)The reasons for this are as follows.

3)The reason for this is obvious.

4)The reason for this is not far to seek.

5)The reason for this is that...

雅思写作黄金总结句之2.表示好处

1)It has the following advantages.

2)It does us a lot of good.

3)It benefits us quite a lot.

4)It is of great benefit to us.

雅思写作黄金总结句之3.表示坏处

1)It has more disadvantages than advantages.

2)It does us much harm.

3)It is harmful to us.

雅思写作黄金总结句之4.表示重要、必要、困难、方便、可能

1)It is important(necessary，difficult，convenient，possible)for *.to do sth.

2)We think it necessary to do sth.

3)It plays an important role in our life.

雅思写作黄金总结句之5.表示措施

1)We should take some effective measures.

2)We should try our best to overcome(conquer)the difficulties.

3)We should do our utmost in doing sth.

4)We should solve the problems that we are confronted(faced)with.

雅思写作黄金总结句之6.表示变化

1)Some changes have taken place in the past five years.

2)A great change will certainly be produced in the world’s communications.

3)The computer has brought about many changes in education.

雅思写作黄金总结句之7.表示事实、现状

1)No one can deny the fact that...

2)There is no denying the fact that...

3)This is a phenomenon that many people are interested in.

4)However，that’s not the case.

雅思写作黄金总结句之8.表示比较

1)There is a striking contrast between them.

雅思写作黄金总结句之9.表示数量

1)It has increased(decreased)from...to...

2)The population in this city has now increased(decreased)to 800，000.

3)The output of July in this factory increased by 15%compared with that of January.

雅思写作黄金总结句之10.表示看法

1)People have(take，adopt，assume)different attitudes towards sth.

2)People have different opinions on this problem.

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