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如何拯救你字数不够的雅思作文 雅思作文7分并非可望而不可及

如何拯救你字数不够的雅思作文?

在雅思议论文写作中,通常建议大家遵循introduction- body-conclusion(引言段-主体段-结论段)的“三步曲”。Body(主体)段落提供了论证观点的理由,是整个文章的主体,在评分中占有很大的比重。

例如9分雅思作文评分就要求:

presents a fully developed position in answer to the question with relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas

如果你问,什么叫fully extended / well supported?就是丰满的主体段。

即使是5分作文,也要求:

is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details

即同样要主体段落丰满才行。

一般来说,想要雅思作文写的好,至少需要含有两个主体段,且每个主体段都必须拥有明确的主题句即topic sentence,并有若干句supporting sentences,也就是我们常说的论据与论点。建议大家在练习议论文写作时遵循几个简单的原则,就能够迅速完成理由段,并且构建连贯和理由充分的议论文哦!

Write a topic sentence for each paragraph you plan to write. Each topic sentence should relate to your thesis statement and introduce what the paragraph will be about. If you find that the topics you want to discuss do not support the thesis statement you have written, revise your thesis statement or reconsider your topic sentences.

简单的来说,就是每一段,必!须!拥有一个明确的主题句,所有论据都围绕这一句展开,避免小段跑题。

Write ideas that support your topic sentences. The topic sentence for each paragraph tells the reader what the paragraph will be about. The ideas stated in the rest of the paragraph should all relate to the topic sentence.

支持句必须围绕主题句展开,烤鸭们一定要注意这一点,如果跑题,那么就会出现较为严重的扣分,那可真是哭都来不及啦!

例子看这里

Hobbies are important for many reasons. First, a hobby can be educational. For example, if the hobby is stamp collecting, the person can learn about the countries of the world and even some of their history. Second, engaging in a hobby can lead to meeting other people with the same interests. A person can also meet other people by going to the school. Third, a person's free time is being used in a positive way. The person has no time to be bored or get into mischief while engaged in the hobby. Finally, some hobbies can lead to a future job. A person who enjoys a hobby-related job is moresatisfied with life.

后面紧跟的First,second, third都是为了支持前面的第一句话。此外,在每一个点,又加入新的支持。比如在First句后面,又加了For example,来支持前面的观点,这样层层递进,文章就看起来格外的脉络清晰。这句中,很明显主题句就是Hobbies are important for many reasons.

但本段也并非完美无瑕哦~ A person can also meet other people by going the school"与hobby重要的原因没有关系,因此削弱了整个段落的连贯性与统一性,应该被去掉。

雅思作文7分并非可望而不可及

现在的年轻人总是会发出“理想很丰满,现实很骨感”这样的感叹,来表达对现实生活的无奈。而在雅思写作考试中,考生们又何尝不会经历这种无奈呢?写作7分是许多考生梦寐以求的分数,但即使是一些外籍教师所撰写的范文,在考官笔下也不过是7-8分!对于国内大多数雅思考生而言,7分似乎是可望而不可及的。那么,究竟怎样的文章,才能得到考官的青睐,最终幸运的得到7分的分数呢?

一.Task response

1. 具体要求

Task response表示任务的完成。在官方给出的评分标准中,7分有这样的要求:

1. Address all parts of the task,

2. Present a clear position throughout the response,

3. Present, extend and support main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus。

① 回答了题目要求的所有问题。②整篇文章观点鲜明。③详细的解释和论证了观点。

2. 范例评析

▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment。

Discuss both views and give your own opinion。

1. 考生需要对题目中的两个相反的观点进行分析,不能只分析自己倾向的观点。即:固定不变的定罪制度有何作用;依据犯罪动机和环境灵活的定罪制度有何作用。

2. 考生需要非常清楚的表明自己的观点,即回答应当如何对罪犯的犯罪行为定罪。

3. 考生对于题目中两个相反观点的分析需要摆出充足的论据,提出自己的理由并通过例子来证明。

7.5分考生范文选段:对固定不变的定罪制度的分析

On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. ‖Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. ‖This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. ‖If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts。

1. 观点:固定的惩罚制度对社会有威慑力。(fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society。)

2. 理由:考虑犯罪成本(reconsider committing crimes in the first place)

3. 扩展结果:有利于社会稳定(lead to social stability and security through minimizing the number of crimes committed。)

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