雅思作文想拿高分 以点带面：雅思作文之巧言善辩与融会贯通

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分 以点带面：雅思作文之巧言善辩与融会贯通，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同， 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准， 你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.


In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据， 缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看， 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

以点带面：雅思作文之巧言善辩与融会贯通

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雅思作文的题材相对固定在几个重要的社会热点话题，尽管考题库里有300道左右的题目，但题材相对集中。因此，对于大量换汤不换药的同类型题目，只要我们掌握了规律，就可以举一反三，融会贯通，以一挡十。

请看下题：

V119 Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students for every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

这实际是从教育领域让我们议论男女平等。类似的一道也是考过多次的考题还有

Some country allow women to join the armed forces, well some others think not such as navy, army doesn't suit for women, do you agree or disagree? Use your own experience and reasons.

G类的考生还曾被考过女性当警察，好还是不好。依此类推，如果哪天考官再出，现在女科学家，女性*官员越来越多，好还是不好。只要准备过其中一篇，我们自可从容应对。下面以教育领域的男女平等为例，我给大家介绍如何巧言善辩，并融会贯通。

V119的关键词有两个，every subject , equal number 这道题，很难折衷地说，每个学科既应该男女人数均等，又不该均等，所以结构上只能写单边支持，或者单边反对，两条路，要么写每个学科男女生人数应该均等，要么写每个学科男女生人数不必强求一致，有趣的是，在写作强化班我给大家的小册子里，两篇V119的高分范文，观点截然相反，但使用的“工具”，或者论据都一模一样，实际上，我们在考场上，想到的可用的论点论据往往是有限的，如何用有限的工具，去解决花样繁多的作文题目，还能巧妙地自圆其说呢？以该题为例：我们可以初步检查一下可用的论点。

“存在的往往就是合理的”，学过雅思写作的同学对这一点一定是深有体会！想一下身边的具体的现象，真的会帮助我们把抽象的作文题具体化，提供最初的写作灵感。中国的大学和国外的大学，现在每个学科有没有做到男女生人数均等呢？答案是否定的。我们接着想原因，有可能是我们该作文的一条重要论据。大家马上就可以告诉我， gender feature 是主要原因，的确，male and female tend to have different physical traits and way of thinking , being adept at certain fields in tertiary education. 以上的论点，正好可以支持“不必强求一致”派。性别特点是一个重要的工具，是我们写男女权利要用的最重要的论据之一。问题是，我们能否用这个论据，来支持“人数均等”派呢？只要想到我们写作课常用的一个表达，就解决问题了：正因为 different gender feature, they tend to complement each other both physically and psychologically , bringing their talents and strengths into full play. 其中，complement 是很多雅思作文都要用到的一个词汇，说男女生互补。也可换形容词用，complementary to each other.

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