雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文：替换句式搞定它

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雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同，这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思(课程)考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准， 你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.



In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据， 缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看， 文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数：There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态：as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文：替换句式搞定它！

雅思写作是否有规律可循，答案是肯定的。至少从语言上来讲，雅思考试的写作可以通过一些句型的替换来实现个人观点的陈述，完成论述过程。熟练掌握运用这些表达方式可以大大节约在考场上的时间，也可以使自己的文章能够流畅自如，从而获得高分。下面就将这些句型做一个分类总结：

提出观点

1. When asked about…, most people say… But many other people regard…as… I personally think…

当被问及对……有什么看法时，大多数人认为……但是，还有很多人认为……我个人认为……

2. When it comes to…, some people think that… Others argue that the opposite is true. There is probably some truth to both arguments, but…

涉及……这一问题，有的人认为应该……另一些人持相反意见。也许双方的观点都有一定道理，但是……

3. It is widely acknowledged that…contributed to… Experts argue that China must introduce… But I doubt whether…alone will solve the problem。

人们普遍认为……专家认为中国必须推行……但我对仅仅……就能解决问题表示怀疑。

4. An increasing number of people are joining… In reaction to the phenomenon, some say… But do they realize that…can also lead to…

越来越多的人……进入了……针对这一现象，一些人认为……但是，他们有没有意识到……也能导致……

5. One of the pressing problem facing our nation (China) today is…and…

我们国家(中国)如今面临的紧迫问题之一是……

6. Perhaps the most dangerous phenomenon gripping the nation today is…

也许当今困扰国家的最危险的现象是……

7. Never before in history has the issue of…been more evident than now。

历史上，……的问题从来没有比现在更加突出。

8. Perhaps it is time to reexamine the idea that…

也许现在是应该重新考虑……的时候了。

9. A growing number of people are beginning to realize that…is not the sole prerequisite for happiness。

越来越多的人开始意识到……并不是幸福的惟一条件。

10. Years of observing human behavior has enabled me to conclude that the major difference between…and…lies solely with…

对人们行为的多年观察使我能够得出这样的结论：……和……的主要区别仅仅在于……

11. There has been undesirable trend in recent years towards… A recent survey showed that…percent of respondents ranked…as their top priority, compared to…percent only a few years ago. Why do people fail to realize that…?

近年来出现了对社会有害的……倾向。最近的一项调查表明，……的调查对象把……作为他们的首选，相比之下，就在几年前，只有……的人这样想。为什么人们没能意识到……不一定带来幸福呢？

12. I recently read a newspaper article on… The deplorable problem of…has aroused public concern nationwide。

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