雅思作文点评：老龄化快速增长的优缺点 雅思作文全面解析

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雅思作文点评：老龄化快速增长的优缺点

In many countries, the number of elderly people is increasing fast. To what extent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

Nowadays, owning to the improvement of living condition(这里习惯用复数), people can live much longer than before, which gives rise to the fast increasing number of elderly people. Some hold that this situation will result in a series of problems, such as social burden, population expansion and so on. While others insist that it agrees the development of modern society and brings many advantages. For my part, I take the latter side with(用for) the following reasons: (74words)

点评：开头稍微写的有点长，不过内容写的还不错。属于通过分析两种不同观点，最后阐述自己观点的写法。(此种写法在雅思大作文的第一段比较常见)

美中不足的是倒数第二句的错误比较明显!while是个连词，应该连接句子与句子，所以这里前面不应该是句号。后面agree是不及物动词，不能直接加宾语。

Firstly, elder people(一会儿elderly people,一会儿又elder people，这不是自相矛盾么!!!) are the fortune of our society. They have enough experiences and capabilities which are badly lacked and needed for our youth when dealing with all sorts of problems, they can still do well in their jobs. Especially(前面应该用逗号，然后这里小写) in some professions, such as teacher, doctor, scientist and so on, sometimes (前面应该用句号，然后这里大写)age means the authority and ability. When you see a doctor, do you prefer an elderly doctor with grey hair or a youth without mustache? (77words)

Secondly, elder people(同上) are the happiness of our society. Increasing number of elderly people is also the embodiment of our improving living quality, which shows our society run(应该第三人称单数)to the right and healthy direction, we(前面句号，这里大写) have more chance and time to serve our elderly people, and it’s the happiest time of all our life to accompany with(accompany是及物动词) our parents, grandparents and great grandparents. (63words)

Finally, elderly people are the lubricant of our society. They have good temper and enough patients(应该是patience吧) to do anything, they can help us to intercede(它是不及物动词，而且主要用人作宾语) social disputes, and they make our society much more harmonious which(前面最好有个逗号)makes for the construction of harmonious society.(43words)

正文段综合点评：此篇是典型的5段式作文的写作，正文段构思出三个分论点来证明自己的观点，的确在构思上花了不少心思。但是，这里我想提的是，还是两方面都分析一下会比较好一点。特别这篇文章是问优点多还是缺点多，那么最好是缺点讲一个，然后优点再讲两个。外国人喜欢这样的辩证分析。

其次，总的来说，作者的语言还是挺流畅的。但是似乎标点有问题，该用句号的时候用逗号，改用逗号的时候用句号，这个也要扣分的!

From mentioned above, the advantages of increasing number of elderly people are obvious more than it disadvantages(典型的Chinese English.应该说there are obviously more advantages than disadvantages.). Elderly people are not the burden of our society but the source of fortune, happiness and harmony of our society.(37words)

全文总评：

尽管总的来说语言水平还是很不错的，内容也写得很充实，但缺点是语言方面还是不够细腻。此文7分。

2007年雅思作文全面解析

作者：牛俞鑫

　　不管07年是否出新题，有几类题目还是会考的，主要有以下几类：

　　1．教育类

　　2．科技影响类

　　3．文化传统类

　　4．国家政策类

　　5．传媒类

　　6．犯罪类

　　这6大类的题目我相信一定会考，而且应该会占很大一部分！

　　练习方法如下：

　　1．教育类练3篇

　　2．科技影响类练2篇

　　3．文化传统类练2篇

　　4．国家政策类练1篇

　　5．传媒类练1篇

　　6．犯罪类练1篇

　　练习的侧重点应该是两方面： 1 、积累观点（即文章的内容或分论点）； 2 、纠正语法，积累常用词汇（这点对最后的得分最重要）

　　经过这几年的研究，我发现雅思考题经常是换汤不还药，也就是说，看似题目不一样，但是写的内容可以互相借鉴的，所以我挑出 10 篇很有代表性的文章让大家练一下，大家最好是灵活运用，不要死背，就算考题不一样，很多内容和词汇都可以借用的！

　　1．教育类

　　Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　In order to improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers, but others think it will result in loss of respect and discipline in classroom. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

　　Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of * life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　2．科技影响类

　　Many people think that public libraries should only provide books to readers and shouldn’t waste their limited funds on expensive high-tech media, such as computer software, DVD or videos. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　In recent years, working at home for one’s employers has become a growing trend in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. Discuss the reasons why it is popular and state your opinion about the social phenomenon.

　　3．文化传统类

　　The government is responsible for protecting a nation’s cultural identity. Thus, some people believe new buildings should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　It is more important for a building to serve its purpose rather than looking beautiful. Architects should not worry about buildings as works of art. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　4．国家政策类

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