雅思作文修改：money 雅思作文全面解析

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雅思作文修改：money spent on art or education

题目：Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary world, art cost（costs） a large figure of money. Some people claim is necessary to invest in art. But still have some people deem that fund should spend（be spent） more on improving health and education instead of art. As far as I am concerned, the first view is overly simplistic.

Speaking myself, protecting art and diffuse it, is the precondition of advancing health and education. The first instance with respect to this is that the aggression on china in the early twenty century. Union army from eight countries used force and entry Yuan-Ming Imperial Garden where save the outstanding representation of Chinese artworks. A greatest art gold mine was destroyed at that time may due to the government of Qing Dynasty inability to strengthen their military and lock of money to maintain it exist. Before long, opium was widespread in china and contributes to negative quality of generation. Second place, education has to link to art, art is a soul of nation. There is no denying that no one country educates offspring without art. To a great extent, investment in art is a significant factor contributing to the development of person happiness and enjoyment.

这段的论据有点扯远了，而且你说的有误，圆明园不是八国联军抢的，是英法联军，总之别说，英国人干的坏事

Admittedly, advancing health and education need not only vigor but fund of government. Those facilities need to maintain and invent, medical skills is become dramatically in the modern days. But when carefully weighting in mind, we may find that improving health and education are international issues, intake from international society is advisable. By contrast, art is unique for ant other country, ignore art is an inexcusable crime because art, once gone, is difficult to restore.

Overall, my view is that spend money in art is the precondition of advancing health and education. In despite of health and education is become increasingly dramatic, but those skills and facilities can intake from international society. For art, actually can not.

整篇文章我给5.5分

论据注意要由浅入深，

第一段，可以写艺术对于完善人的性格，对于个人修养的提高都是有好处的。

第二段，上升到社会的高度，投资艺术，建博物馆啊美术馆啊等，可以传承传统文化，保持民族特色

2007年雅思作文全面解析

作者：牛俞鑫

　　不管07年是否出新题，有几类题目还是会考的，主要有以下几类：

　　1．教育类

　　2．科技影响类

　　3．文化传统类

　　4．国家政策类

　　5．传媒类

　　6．犯罪类

　　这6大类的题目我相信一定会考，而且应该会占很大一部分！

　　练习方法如下：

　　1．教育类练3篇

　　2．科技影响类练2篇

　　3．文化传统类练2篇

　　4．国家政策类练1篇

　　5．传媒类练1篇

　　6．犯罪类练1篇

　　练习的侧重点应该是两方面： 1 、积累观点（即文章的内容或分论点）； 2 、纠正语法，积累常用词汇（这点对最后的得分最重要）

　　经过这几年的研究，我发现雅思考题经常是换汤不还药，也就是说，看似题目不一样，但是写的内容可以互相借鉴的，所以我挑出 10 篇很有代表性的文章让大家练一下，大家最好是灵活运用，不要死背，就算考题不一样，很多内容和词汇都可以借用的！

　　1．教育类

　　Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　In order to improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers, but others think it will result in loss of respect and discipline in classroom. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

　　Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of * life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　2．科技影响类

　　Many people think that public libraries should only provide books to readers and shouldn’t waste their limited funds on expensive high-tech media, such as computer software, DVD or videos. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　In recent years, working at home for one’s employers has become a growing trend in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. Discuss the reasons why it is popular and state your opinion about the social phenomenon.

　　3．文化传统类

　　The government is responsible for protecting a nation’s cultural identity. Thus, some people believe new buildings should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

　　It is more important for a building to serve its purpose rather than looking beautiful. Architects should not worry about buildings as works of art. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　4．国家政策类

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