雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯雅思作文上不了6分，原来都是因为这个错误

更新：2023年04月16日 19:30 雅思无忧

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯雅思作文上不了6分，原来都是因为这个错误，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯雅思作文上不了6分，原来都是因为这个错误

雅思作文想拿高分，这四个错误一定不能犯

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同，这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思(课程)考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准，你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people，但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据，缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看，文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看，文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数：There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态：as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢，我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文上不了6分，原来都是因为这个错误

在这几年的雅思教学经历中，经常会遇到这样一些学生，阅读听力可以达到七分，甚至八分这样的分数，但写作仅仅维持在5.5分，考过几次都没有任何长进。当然考官在评判写作分数时会通过内容、结构、词汇及语法这四个方面进行评分。但如果在写作过程中一味追求难词，长句，而基本语法问题错误百出，那这样的文章必然是与6+无缘了。更要说明的事，那些阅读听力拿了高分但写作中分数不高的学生，低分原因部分就是因为试图写长句，但在最基本的简单句都出现了错误。究竟如何才能写出6+的作文，来看看新东方在线致赢雅思于思靓老师的解析。

今天主要从语法中最为基本的主谓角度，剖析下怎么先把基本的句子写对，再去构建长句。请各位谨记，写作的首要原则是，先做到精准再做到精彩，如果简单句都错误百出，那再多的所谓“长句难句”也没有用。

相信很多考生都有同样的感受，花了几年甚至十几年的时间学习英语，其中语法这部分学明白的没有几个。不过当我问到学生，语法过多的细节概念我们先不追究，就说主谓关系这，能分清楚不？基本所有学生都会自信的说，主谓这个语法点，我还是没有问题的。但就是主谓这里，让很多学生都翻了船。

先来看下，从我学生材料中挑选的这几个句子:

1.There are many people think that parents play an important role in children’s education.

2.In terms of the consumption of beef saw a dramatic increase.

3.If sufficient underground train systems are built.

仔细观察，不知大家是否发现了这几个句子中的语法问题呢？我们首先要承认，这三个句子用词都还不错，但都在语法这出了问题。首先看句1，如果大家对主谓要求有所了解的话，就应该知道一个句子中只能包含一个谓语。但这个句子出现了两个谓语are 及 think 。正确改法，把think变为非谓语动词的形式， thinking。

句2，句子中缺少主语，很多人会把in terms of the consumption of chicken 当做主语，但他实际只是状语，正确改法， In terms of the consumption of chicken, it saw a dramatic rise. 加上it做句子的主语。

最后一个，句3，确实有主谓，但句意不完整，如果建立了充分的地铁系统，之后会怎么样呢？缓解交通阻塞还是会消耗*大量资金？不仅从语义角度来讲，这个句子是不完整的，从语法角度来说也是有残缺的。 If 用来引导从句，要附属于主句而存在，那这里我们只见从句，不见主句。所以，还是一个错误的句子。正确改法, If sufficient underground train systems are built, then the traffic congestion will be eased.

在考官的五分评分标准中明确的指出，五分的作文语法上会： may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader. 言外之意，造成读者理解困难的文章，语法上只能达到5分。那这里我们所说的句1出现的谓语问题，句2出现的主语问题以及句3的句义不完整，就是会导致读者理解上出现困难的语法问题。如果评分标准中语法这项仅仅是5分的话，全文的分数一般也就不过5.5了。

下一讲，我们会就语法中最为核心也同样是很基本的主谓问题加以讲解，希望同学们可以在后期写作过程中，避免这些致命的语法问题。