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雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核,综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力,实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说,也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文高分的技巧和体会,希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题,敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文高分的技巧和体会

雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同,这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思(课程)考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.



In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数:There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态:as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文高分的技巧和体会


  回国后,因为忙于工作,对英语的接触比原来要少多了,有时自己都感到有些生疏。为了更好地了解雅思考试的最新动态,同时也检查自己的英语状况和应试水平,去年我参加了一次国内雅思考试,听力分数: 6.0 ;阅读分数: 8.0 ;写作分数: 8.0 ;口语分数: 7.0 ;总分 :7.5 。对听力不甚满意,对阅读和写作则有点喜出望外。

  在此,我愿意把我雅思作文高分的技巧和体会和大家一起交流,以期更多的雅友能够成功越过烤鸭难关。我的最为重要的体会就是:要想作文拿高分,不但要看內容写的如何,而且更要注重作文的文法、结构。其中尤其重要的是对〖 EASSY 〗文法和结构的妥善处理。

  在我看来,作文是一种创造性的水平测试。写好作文其实是有很多技巧的。特别值得注意的是,〖 PARAGRAPH 〗 和〖 EASSY 〗严格来说是不同的。国内的老师习惯按〖 PARAGRAPH 〗的结构教学生写作文,因而学生在参 IELTS 考试时也就按老师说的 WRITING STRUCTURE 依样画瓢,再加上内容和表达方式也许还有一定差距,所以大部分考生的作文在 5-6 分间徘徊。纵使那些远渡重洋的莘莘学子,虽然拥有了更好的语言环境,但由于在文法、结构上的老一套,仍然可能难以摆脱作文在低分区徘徊的尴尬局面。

  究其原因,就是〖 PARAGRAPH 〗与老外的思路有较大差别。老外对雅思作文易于接受〖 EASSY 〗的文法、结构。所以,从这个意义上来说,雅思作文要拿高分,纯粹按照老师所说的〖 PARAGRAPH 〗写法是远远不够的。因为 IELTS 作文中的 TASK 2 从根本上来说是要求我們写 “EASSY BUT NOT A PARAGRAPH” 。下面,我将以〖 EASSY 〗为特征的雅思作文的 STRUCTURE 要点及其和〖 PARAGRAPH 〗的区别列示如下,与大家一起分享。

☆〖 PARAGRAPH 〗 :
1 . fist sentence : main idea ;
2 . suppording sentence: : give more information to support the idea ;
3 . last sentence : main idea ( 即把 first sentence 的意思用另外一种方式表达 ) 。

☆〖 EASSAY 〗 :
1. genreal information and thesis statement ;
2. body paragraph ,为了要 support your idea ,例句是最好的方法;
3. concluing sentence and concluding comment 。

  而就〖 EASSAY 〗而言, thesis statement 是最为重要的一部分内容,也是〖 EASSAY 〗的主角,应当着力处理好,写出〖 EASSAY 〗的真正味道。 body paragraph 的展开要内容贴切、相互呼应,例句对观点的立论形成强有力的支持;整个文章前后有机一体,自然流畅;同时,也应注意在作文中善用好的英语句型和习惯用法、短语,避免用中文思路和中国式表达方式行文,在文章中还要尽量避免重复使用同样的单词,以免文章枯燥。这些都是写好雅思作文的又一要点。

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