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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 如何使你的雅思作文句型富有变化(上)

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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 如何使你的雅思作文句型富有变化(上)

让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议

  中国烤鸭在雅思写作中,极爱用长难句,自己感觉一写长难句就会高大上,但其实不然。本文中新东方雅思网将为大家提出一些让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的建议,供大家参考。

建议一:避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息,完全可以被删掉。

比如:When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换

例如:Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

建议二:避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表达方式为:

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换

例如:My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如:The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构

例如下面的句子:There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为:

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为:

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如:Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表达方式为:

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。

例如:In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态後,彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,

例如:My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达

例如:Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

如何使你的雅思作文句型富有变化(上)


  句式就是句子的结构方式,也就是句子的式样或格式。不同的思想内容要用不同的句式来表达;而同一思想内容也可以用不同的句式来表达。句式不同,表达效果也就不同。只有句式多样化,文章才会生动有趣,充满活力。可是,在实际写作中,初学写作的学生往往一篇文章都是千篇一律的简单句,文章单调乏味,毫无生气。笔者认为,恰当地使用某些方法或手段有助于实际表达形式的多样化,增强表达效果。兹将常用方法简单介绍如下。

  一、改变句子开头

  许多学生在写作中倾向于用与人有关系的词性,用名词和代词作为句子的开头,如 People,We,I,He,They,She等。但这种开头见多了,难免让人厌倦。试比较:

  A.People throughout the country have greatly demanded all kinds of nutritious food.

  B.There is a great demand across the country for all kinds of nutritious food.

  第一句改用非人称名词作为主语开头,第二句则用there +be句型开头。这样既改变了主语+谓语+宾语单调句型,又把想强调的意思突出出来。实际上,为了把文章写得生动活泼,除了用主语开头外,还可以用句子的其他成分开头。

  1.用副词开头

  Too often,students stray into the habit of cheating on tests.

  2.用同位语开头

  Air,water and oxygen,everything that is necessary for life.

  3.用状语开头

  Dark and empty,the house looked very different from the way I remembered it.

  4.用表语开头

  Equally essential to the highest success in learning a language are intense interest plus persistent effort.

  5.用宾语开头

  My advice you would not listen to;my helps you laughed at.Now you will have what you asked for.

  6.以短语修饰语开头

  1)以介词短语开头

  To me the news was very interesting,but to my wife very boring.

  2)以分词短语开头

  Disturbed by the discord of American life in recent decades,Menchester took flight for the pacific islands.

  3)以不定式短语开头

  To pass the exam,you should work very hard.
  二、巧用连接词

  有的学生在作文中使用过多简单句,成了简单句堆砌;有的写复杂句时,动辄用so, and,then,but,or,however,yet等非但达不到丰富表达方式的目的,反而使句子结构松散、呆板。为了避免这种现象,可以通过使用连接词,尤其是一些表示从属关系的连接词,如 who,which,that,because,since,although,after,as,before,when,whenever,if,unless,as if等,不仅能够丰富句型,而且还能够把思想表达得更清楚,意义更连贯。例如:

  Natural resources are very limited.They will be exhausted in the near future.It is not true.But it becomes a major concern around the world.This is a widely accepted fact.

  这段文字用简单句表达,它们之间内在的逻辑关系含糊不清,意思支离破碎。如果使用连接词,将单句与其前后合并,形成主次关系,就把一个比较复杂的内容和关系表达得层次清楚、结构严谨。例如:

  It is a widely accepted fact that there is a major concern around the world for the exhaustion of limited natural resources in the near future,though it is unlikely to be true.

  再如:

  The Mississippi River is one of the longest rivers in the world,and in spring time it often overflows its banks,and the lives of many people are endangered.

  此句用and把三个分句一贯到底,既乏味又可笑。如果使用了关系代词which,语义就会更连贯,语言也会更流畅:

  The Mississippi River,which is one of the longest rivers in the world,often overflows its banks in the spring time,endangering the lives of many people.

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