雅思作文高分例文之城市发展类详解让你的雅思作文简洁完美的三条建议

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雅思作文高分例文之城市发展类详解让你的雅思作文简洁完美的三条建议

雅思作文高分例文之城市发展类详解

有几百年历史的城镇,似乎距离我们很遥远,但是仔细一想你脚下的这片热土早已饱经风霜,只是你没有意识到而已。本次考题的难度较为有限,首先城市发展与规划方面的话题算是较为常见。同时本题的提问方式是非常简单的双提问的报告方式。因此对于有一定备考经历的考生而言，此题应该不会给大家造成什么障碍。

例题如下:重庆环球雅思

There are many towns and cities designed and

constructed in previous centuries, and they are suitable for those times. What

problems are caused by this today? And how to solve these problems?

Visiting ancient towns and cities is seemingly thought as an significant part of people’s

traveling plans, whereas talking about settling down there people surely will

begin to doubt whether living there is possible and whether comfortable or not.

开头段还是一如既往地介绍背景和点题,由于本题的提问方式和以往的辩论型问题不同, 因此本段的点题也略有变化.

这类报告文章,通常情况下在开头段不会清晰阐述笔者的立场。

Eventually, residents in old towns and cities built and planned

long time ago are confronted with quite a number of problems. To begin with, narrow streets

there were designed before modern transports’ popularity, leading to the fact

that an efficient public transport system cannot be applied. In addition, pipelines for

natural gas and heating system, two considerably important social services for

modern lifestyle, cannot be in harmony with constructions built hundreds of

years ago. Metropolis in history are usually horizontal ones without any

high-rise buildings, and thus relatively *aller population is able to be

accommodated there, which is absolutely against urbanization regarded as main

task for most of governments worldwide.

本段内容只针对问题一。用排比的形式提出了现如今居住在古城里面的居民正在面临什么问题。本段罗列了三个主要问题,在真实考试中为了篇幅的控制通常两个问题即可满足篇幅要求.

It seems easy that governments can utilize modern technology to modify old towns and

cities for providing local people with much more comfortable living conditions.

Rebuilding like this, nevertheless, definitely ruins what our ancestors left us.

Instead, governments should make every effort to preserve old towns and cities,

and strictly control the population of who are willing to accept ancient

lifestyle and settle down there. Adjacent to old towns and cities, modern cities

should be planned by governments where residents can share more social resource

and enjoy more convenience brought by usage of high-tech in our daily life. Only

by this way, can those cultural heritages be protected perfectly.

自然而然地,

本段重点回答题干的第二个问题,既解决方案。只不过在观点方面, 笔者坚持了新城市的建设才是解决问题的关键。而任何对于古城的改造都是破坏。

Reforming old towns and cities with a couple of hundred years' history is completely an

unwise decision. Meanwhile, as for who like to enjoy a modern, comfortable and

convenient lifestyle, moving out of old places seems like the only solution.

让你的雅思作文简洁完美的三条建议

　　很多学生在练习英文作文时，认为长句、难句或复杂句能够提升文章的语言质量，展示自己“深厚”的语言功底，并因此获得更高的分数。他们在备考复习时也花了很多精力在长句的练习上，考试时也会尽量使用长句。这种想法确实有一定的道理，因为很多考试如新托福的写作科目评分标准中确实有从语法或用词的多样性等角度考察语言质量的评分项目，考生如果能够熟练地运用各种句式写出精彩的长句，确实能给文章增色不少。

　　然而，雅思中国网雅思专家认为：一味地追求句子的长度有时反而会牺牲句子的“可读性”，特别是对一些基础一般的学生来说，有时生硬地追求长句反而破坏了句子的句法准确性。下面我们就来看一些例子，体会一些写得并不成功的长句和怎样修改的建议：

　　建议一：避免空洞的单词和词组

　　1. 一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。比如下面的句子：

　　When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。
　　这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：
　　Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

　　2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换，例如：

　　Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。
　　“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：
　　Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

　　建议二：避免重复

　　1. 尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复，但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。例如下面这个例子：:

　　The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。
　　large 对一个farm来说就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改为：
　　The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

　　更简洁的表达方式为：

　　My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

　　2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换，例如：

　　My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。
　　这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly，显得更为简洁：
　　My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

　　建议三：选择最恰当的语法结构

　　选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要，但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则：

　　1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如：.

　　The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。
　　从意思上来分析，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是situation，谓语动词是was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念，可以改为下面这句话：
　　My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

　　2. 避免频繁使用“there be”结构，例如下面的句子：

　　There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

　　可以改为：
　　My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

　　更简洁的句式为：
　　My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

　　3. 把从句改为短语或单词。例如：

　　Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

　　简介的表达方式为：
　　The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

　　4. 仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态。例如：

　　In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

　　本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”，而使用了被动语态后，仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一些：

　　In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

　　5. 用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语，例如下面这句话：

　　My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。
　　Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达，即loiter：
　　My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

　　6. 有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达，例如：

　　Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

　　两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子：

　　Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

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