揭秘雅思作文高分句型：如何描述数字变化这四个错误一定不能犯

更新：2023年04月22日 03:00 雅思无忧

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了揭秘雅思作文高分句型：如何描述数字变化这四个错误一定不能犯，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。
揭秘雅思作文高分句型：如何描述数字变化这四个错误一定不能犯

揭秘雅思作文高分句型：如何描述数字变化

　　12个单词

趋势描述单词注意事项

上升 grow, climb, soar 1.其中“soar”和“sink”为极限词汇，不能添加任何修饰；

2.在句子和文章中，事实上很少用到上述动词的原型，相反使用最多的是它们的“过去式”，以及对应的名词；

3.上升和下降需要和数字建立连接，可供选择的介词to, by, of

To 配合动词和名词，表示“达到”

By/of 表示“变化了”；by跟在动词后面，而of跟在名词后面

下降 drop, fall, sink

平稳 stay unchanged at+不变的值

波动 vary between…and…(两个极值；名词 fluctuation between…and…

程度 dramatically (significantly)剧烈的；progressively (gradually)逐渐的；slightly (slowly)缓慢的表中所提供的单词均为“副词”，需搭配动词使用；如果需要搭配、修饰“名词”，则上述的词汇应变为“形容词”，即：dramatic, progressive, slight

3个重要的句式：

例句：在2005年到2006年间，当澳洲当地的水费usage charge增加了每千升per kiloliter 0.25元。(看看下面的三种不同表达形式)

(1) 主谓句(强调量词的变化)

The usage charge in Australia grew by $0.25 per kiloliter during 2005-2006.

(2) 主谓宾句(强调量词的变化，词性变化)

The usage charge in Australia had a growth of $0.25 per kiloliter between 2005 and 2006.

(3) 被动句(强调变化本身)

A growth of $0.25 per kiloliter was found in the usage charge in Australia over 1 year to Year 2006.

NB: 表示时间的变化，常用的手法

From…to…; between…and…; during…-…; for/over时间差to终止时间

4个连接词

第一种：一个对象在不同时期的变化(时间变化)，before /, after which

第二种：不同对象的比较 similarly (= The similar pattern is found in…) / however (In contrast,)

例题：

在过去的2年中，中国的GDP(Gross Domestic Production)增长了10%，预计在明年GDP仍可能增长8%左右。但是，日本的GDP在过去的2年中，基本呈现下降趋势，而且预计明年下降得更猛烈。

In the recent 2 years, GDP of China has grown by 10%， after which it is estimated to climb by 8% next year. In contrast, a dropping trend, in the last 2 years, has been found in that of Japan, before it is predicted to be more dramatic。

当不是特别能够确定图表的具体数值时，我们可以在数字前加上about, around, nearly, approximately, or so等一些比较模糊的副词修饰。

看一道例题：

　During 1979- 1999, visits overseas by UK residents, about 12 million in 1979, had a growth to nearly 52 million. The similar pattern was found in visits to the UK by international residents from around 10 million to 30 million. 6.5分

UK residents, about 12 million in 1979, had a growth to nearly 52 million. The similar pattern was found in visits to the UK by international residents from around 10 million to 30 million, but climbing slower than the former. 7分

In 1979, visits abroad by UK residents, 2 million more than those to the UK by overseas residents, was 12 million, after which a dramatic rise to nearly 52 million was found in 1999, when the similar pattern was seen in the visits to the UK by international residents to nearly 30 million. 8分

　　NB：高分的内容应该是信息量较大的，而且处处充斥着比较和对比的感觉。在一个句子中，充分利用“插入语-解释和补充”，以及非限制性定语从句来补充其他的内容，最后利用similarly或however进行比较。

雅思作文想拿高分这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同，这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准，你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people，但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据，缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看，文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看，文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢，我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。