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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 手把手教你将雅思作文简单句变复杂句

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让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议 手把手教你将雅思作文简单句变复杂句

让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的三大建议

  中国烤鸭在雅思写作中,极爱用长难句,自己感觉一写长难句就会高大上,但其实不然。本文中新东方雅思网将为大家提出一些让雅思作文“简洁漂亮”的建议,供大家参考。

建议一:避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息,完全可以被删掉。

比如:When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换

例如:Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

建议二:避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表达方式为:

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换

例如:My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如:The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构

例如下面的句子:There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为:

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为:

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如:Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表达方式为:

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。

例如:In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态後,彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,

例如:My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达

例如:Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

手把手教你将雅思作文简单句变复杂句

雅思高分作文,一般都会有一个明显的特征:文中含有个别精彩的复杂句。那么复杂句该怎么写呢?小编这就为大家解答。

在教学过程中,强调让学生多写单句,单句写好了,复杂句也会写。这个做法可能和大部分的老师是相反的。但这个教学方法基于一个简单的道理:雅思考官不好蒙骗。你一个复杂句如果写的不对,考官马上可以看出来,分数马上就会降低。因此,踏实写好简单句,分数更加容易提高。

只有当你熟悉单句后,才可以将句子连接起来。

方法1:如果两个简单句没有因果关系,基本上是两个独立的事情,往往可以简单地用and相连。

举例:Children are not sensitive to prices and parents prefer to satisfy their needs。

方法2:如果两个简单句有一定的因果关系,往往可以用状语从句相连。

一般来说,if 和when引导条件状语从句(也有一定因果关系,只是不那么强)

举例:If advertising campaigns directed at children are regulated, children will not pester their parents to buy many goods for them。

Since, as, because, so等引导原因或者结果状语从句,表示比较强的因果关系

举例:some children like fast food since they are overwhelmed by fast food advertisements every day。

方法3:如果状语从句怕重复,可以用and(或者;)+连接词的方式

有很多连接词because of this, as a result of this, consequently, as a consequence 等,都是表示因果关系。

举例:some children are addicted to violent video games, and because of this, they can show aggression and bully their peers at school。

方法4:如果第一个单句的最后一个单词和第二个单句的第一个单词重复,可以用定语从句连接。

 举例:Children are increasingly temperamental due to their addiction to violent electronic games. These games are normally promoted by advertising firms。

可以改成:Children are increasingly temperamental due to their addiction to violent electronic games, which are normally promoted by advertising firms。

方法5:如果第二个单句是第一个单句的结果,有可能使用非限制性定语从句

举例:Advertisements have given a lot of information about products. This enables parents to make well-informed buying decisions。

可以改成:Advertisements have given a lot of information about products, which can help parents to make well-informed buying decisions。

简而言之,不要嫌弃简单句,简单句写熟了,复杂句很容易写。

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