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雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核,综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力,实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说,也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文高分要讲究“四化”,希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题,敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯 雅思作文高分要讲究“四化”

雅思作文想拿高分,这四个错误一定不能犯

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2,同其他考官范文不同,这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子,假如你是雅思(课程)考官,按照写作评分的四大项标准, 你会给他打几分呢?

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.



In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看,考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化,但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car,local bus 及long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的,先描写也毋庸置疑,但local bus 和long distance bus,变化数据设计不多,同时变化趋势也不相同,放在一起描述没有意义。其次,此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据,这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位,考生的作文中带的是people, 但仔细审题后我们会发现,这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles,通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构,通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子,但两段的绝对没有。同时,文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据, 缺少了开头段的引入,结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看, 文章代词及连词使用较好

a. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people asits figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. Its指代long distance bus ride

b. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看, 文章细小问题较多。

a. 时态:数据变化时间为1985-2000,为一般过去,考生采用的为一般现在。

b. 主谓一致:However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数,谓语动词单数,主谓不一致。

c. 名词单复数:There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d. 被动语态:as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢, 我们来看下考官评语,实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出,于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短,像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题,如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现,像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文高分要讲究“四化”

写作是测试语言能力的重要方式,雅思写作考试要求在一个小时内完成两篇文章,这对每一名考生的观点思维能力和语言组织能力提出了较高要求。在写作部分的备考过程中,很多考生往往不知所措,一片茫然,原本充足的复习时间在慌乱中一天天度过,文章中的语言不是僵化单一,就是过于复杂, 整个篇章也缺乏逻辑性,所花费的时间也远远超出预期。要在雅思写作考试中从容表现,广大考生应早日实现“四化”--内容简单化、结构模式化、语言装饰化、考前要强化。

内容简单化

雅思考试作文的具体内容并不是评卷人要重点考量的,参考任何一本雅思辅导书,考生都会发现其中同一类题目的文章立场往往大同小异,评卷人评判的主要是考生的语言表达能力,考生在构思时只须保证内容符合逻辑,能够言之有理、言之成理、切题即可,然后把更多的注意力放在如何追求语言的得体性上;考生在构思内容上所花的时间不应超过5分钟,在认真审题并将其理解透彻以后,可以在试卷的空白处列一个提纲,用关键词即可,以此作为写作过程中内容的提示,同时也有助考生清晰地把握篇章结构。这样在提笔写作的过程中可将重点放在保证语言的流畅得体上,不会因为内容而中断思路。在篇章的构思和语言的运用上,应尽量简洁明了,以易于实现和安全可靠为宗旨。要知道,250字左右的 task 2作文中不可能有太多的空间让我们展示过于深刻复杂的思维和句子的。重要的是,先得到分数,然后才有可能拿高分。

结构模式化

雅思作文不仅题目弹性很小,而且题型相对稳定,这就为考生在短期内提高作文分数创造了一个条件,使考生完全可以在考前针对考试中可能出现的题型按照固定的结构模式进行训练成为可能。IELTS作文考题从语言形式上可大致分为二个类型,第一种为二选一,即题目给出两种观点,问考生倾向于哪一种观点,如:“有人认为,高中毕业生应当立即进入大学继续学习,另一些人则认为高中毕业生应当用至少一年时间工作和旅行,然后再进入大学学习。你倾向那种观点?”第二种题型是提出一个观点,问考生同意与否或表达立场,如:“有些人认为应当用快餐取代传统餐饮。 你在多大程度上同意还是不同意这个观点?”

解决方案一

修正型一边倒的写法是指考生即可以写赞成这种观点的理由,也可以谈反对它的理由,但由于赞成的理由多于反对的理由,所以最终考生还是同意这一种观点。这种写法显出考生的态度较为客观,不武断,而且从正反两方面谈,考生写起来会觉得可写的内容较多。但须注意保持一定的倾向性,避免一半对一半的完全折中。

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