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揭秘雅思作文高分句型:如何描述数字变化 让你的雅思作文简洁完美的三条建议

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揭秘雅思作文高分句型:如何描述数字变化 让你的雅思作文简洁完美的三条建议

揭秘雅思作文高分句型:如何描述数字变化

  趋势写作 identify trend

12个单词 + 3个句式 + 4个连接词

12个单词

趋势 描述单词 注意事项

上升 grow, climb, soar 1.其中“soar”和“sink”为极限词汇,不能添加任何修饰;

2.在句子和文章中,事实上很少用到上述动词的原型,相反使用最多的是它们的“过去式”,以及对应的名词;

3.上升和下降需要和数字建立连接,可供选择的介词to, by, of

To 配合动词和名词,表示“达到”

By/of 表示“变化了”;by跟在动词后面,而of跟在名词后面

下降 drop, fall, sink

平稳 stay unchanged at+不变的值

波动 vary between…and…(两个极值; 名词 fluctuation between…and…

程度 dramatically (significantly)剧烈的;progressively (gradually)逐渐的;slightly (slowly)缓慢的 表中所提供的单词均为“副词”,需搭配动词使用;如果需要搭配、修饰“名词”,则上述的词汇应变为“形容词”,即:dramatic, progressive, slight

3个重要的句式:

例句:在2005年到2006年间,当澳洲当地的水费usage charge增加了每千升per kiloliter 0.25元。(看看下面的三种不同表达形式)

(1) 主谓句(强调量词的变化)

The usage charge in Australia grew by $0.25 per kiloliter during 2005-2006.

(2) 主谓宾句(强调量词的变化,词性变化)

The usage charge in Australia had a growth of $0.25 per kiloliter between 2005 and 2006.

(3) 被动句(强调变化本身)

A growth of $0.25 per kiloliter was found in the usage charge in Australia over 1 year to Year 2006.

NB: 表示时间的变化,常用的手法

From…to…; between…and…; during…-…; for/over时间差to终止时间

4个连接词

第一种:一个对象在不同时期的变化(时间变化),before /, after which

第二种:不同对象的比较 similarly (= The similar pattern is found in…) / however (In contrast,)

例题:

在过去的2年中,中国的GDP(Gross Domestic Production)增长了10%,预计在明年GDP仍可能增长8%左右。但是,日本的GDP在过去的2年中,基本呈现下降趋势,而且预计明年下降得更猛烈。

In the recent 2 years, GDP of China has grown by 10%, after which it is estimated to climb by 8% next year. In contrast, a dropping trend, in the last 2 years, has been found in that of Japan, before it is predicted to be more dramatic。

当不是特别能够确定图表的具体数值时,我们可以在数字前加上about, around, nearly, approximately, or so等一些比较模糊的副词修饰。

看一道例题:

During 1979- 1999, visits overseas by UK residents, about 12 million in 1979, had a growth to nearly 52 million. The similar pattern was found in visits to the UK by international residents from around 10 million to 30 million. 6.5分

UK residents, about 12 million in 1979, had a growth to nearly 52 million. The similar pattern was found in visits to the UK by international residents from around 10 million to 30 million, but climbing slower than the former. 7分

In 1979, visits abroad by UK residents, 2 million more than those to the UK by overseas residents, was 12 million, after which a dramatic rise to nearly 52 million was found in 1999, when the similar pattern was seen in the visits to the UK by international residents to nearly 30 million. 8分

  NB:高分的内容应该是信息量较大的,而且处处充斥着比较和对比的感觉。在一个句子中,充分利用“插入语-解释和补充”,以及非限制性定语从句来补充其他的内容,最后利用similarly或however进行比较。

让你的雅思作文简洁完美的三条建议


  很多学生在练习英文作文时,认为长句、难句或复杂句能够提升文章的语言质量,展示自己“深厚”的语言功底,并因此获得更高的分数。他们在备考复习时也花了很多精力在长句的练习上,考试时也会尽量使用长句。这种想法确实有一定的道理,因为很多考试如新托福的写作科目评分标准中确实有从语法或用词的多样性等角度考察语言质量的评分项目,考生如果能够熟练地运用各种句式写出精彩的长句,确实能给文章增色不少。

  然而,雅思中国网雅思专家认为:一味地追求句子的长度有时反而会牺牲句子的“可读性”,特别是对一些基础一般的学生来说,有时生硬地追求长句反而破坏了句子的句法准确性。下面我们就来看一些例子,体会一些写得并不成功的长句和怎样修改的建议:

  建议一: 避免空洞的单词和词组

  1. 一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息,完全可以被删掉。比如下面的句子:

  When all things are considered, young *s of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。
  这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:
  Young *s of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

  2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换,例如:

  Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。
  “due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:
  Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。

  建议二: 避免重复

  1. 尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。例如下面这个例子::

  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。
  large 对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:
  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

  更简洁的表达方式为:

  My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

  2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换,例如:

  My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。
  这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:
  My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。

  建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构

  选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

  1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如:.

  The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。
  从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:
  My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

  2. 避免频繁使用“there be”结构,例如下面的句子:

  There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

  可以改为:
  My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

  更简洁的句式为:
  My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

  3. 把从句改为短语或单词。例如:

  Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

  简介的表达方式为:
  The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。

  4. 仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。例如:

  In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。

  本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

  In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。

  5. 用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,例如下面这句话:

  My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。
  Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:
  My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。

  6. 有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达,例如:

  Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too *all to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。

  两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

  Profits from the farm were sometimes too *all to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。

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