雅思作文想拿高分 新东方名师权威解读雅思作文评分标准

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分 新东方名师权威解读雅思作文评分标准，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文想拿高分 这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同， 这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准， 你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.


In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people， 但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据， 缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看， 文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看， 文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢， 我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

新东方名师权威解读雅思作文评分标准

      2008年8月的北京，奥运选手们刚刚经历了一场规模空前盛大的考试，我们在感受运动员站在领奖台上的风采时，也深深地体会到了他们准备过程的艰辛；与此同时，在暑期炎热的武汉，许多怀揣出国留学深造梦想的“烤鸭”（雅思考生的昵称）们也在如火如荼地准备着雅思考试，而写作正是摆在他们面前的难关之一。

      许多同学认为只要熟背模板（老师或参考书上所给的好的范文和句子）、死记单词就可以拿高分，还有的同学认为只要写出长句、难句、结构复杂甚至连自己都看不懂的句子就可以打动雅思考官，这些都是对雅思作文要求的片面理解。实际上，写作是有规律可循的，只有遵循一定的原则和标准，才能获得好的成绩。本文就雅思作文的评分标准作一个深度分析，供大家参考。

　　2005年1月官方公布的最新评分标准，具体如下：

        根据以上表格我们不难看出，Task 1和Task 2的评分标准只有第一条（任务完成情况）不同，由于Task 1考查的是图表作文，所以要比Task 2要少一项任务，就是不需要有作者的立场（Position）。除此之外，两个任务都需要有具体的内容和合理的结构、良好的连贯性和衔接性、丰富的词汇资源以及语法的多样性和准确性。那么，这一评分标准中体现了怎样的内涵，我们又如何才能达到这样的标准呢？下面我想结合Task 2的具体实例来谈一谈。

    一、任务完成情况

　　任务完成情况主要包括三个方面：内容（content）是否切题，立场（position）是否鲜明并得到有效阐释，结构（structure）是否有逻辑性。

　　内容如何做到切题，关键在于审题时要找准题目的主题（topic）以及针对该主题所提出的问题（topic questions）。一般来说，主题就是题目中反复出现或主句中充当主语的或宾语的名词以及名词短语，而问句则通常就是我们要讨论的要点，如果要点理解有误或漏掉某个要点，则都属于没有切题。譬如：

    With the increasing use of mobile phones, less people tend to write letters. Some people believe that writing letters will disappear completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　从这个题目当中我们不难看出writing letters 出现的频率较高，且都在主句中出现，说明它就是我们要找的主题，如果你过多描述mobile phones给我们带来的好处就跑题了。另外，题目的写作任务也很清楚：Do you agree that writing letters will disappear completely? 属于“支持或反对”类的题，必须明确表达你的立场，不能既同意又不同意，同时表达你同意或不同意的理由。

　　立场要做到鲜明并得到有效阐释需要有如下几个内容：topic sentence（主题句），main ideas（论点），supporting points（论据）。主题句通常放在文章的首段，开门见山地表明你的立场，主题句只能有一个；论点放在中间段的首句，让读者一目了然，论点应该有两个以上，否则论证就不充分；论据包括evidence（证据）、examples（例子）等，放在论点后面，每个论点都应该有论据作支撑，否则就会显得论据不足。

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