雅思作文想拿高分雅思作文禁忌

更新：2023年05月04日 04:39 雅思无忧

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文想拿高分雅思作文禁忌，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。
雅思作文想拿高分雅思作文禁忌

雅思作文想拿高分这四个错误一定不能犯！

雅思写作向来是令大家头疼的问题，有时候觉得自己写得很不错，但是得分却很低，本文中，新东方在线于思靓老师将结合考生作文为大家详解雅思作文技巧。

大家现在所看到的这篇小作文选自C6T2，同其他考官范文不同，这篇文章出自考生之手。具体这篇考生的作文得了几分咱们先*个关子，假如你是雅思考官，按照写作评分的四大项标准，你会给他打几分呢？

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

In 2000 the most preferred mode of travel is by car with 4, 806 people. There's a noticeable decrease in public transportation locally where it dropped from 429 people in 1985 to 274 people in 2000. However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000. Which probably made people to take the take the train more often. There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. The biggest leap in the chart is the increase of taxi users who are tripled in 2000 with 42 people. Where it was only 13 in 1985

Apart from all this modes of travel, there are some more different types of travel as well of course. Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000.

我们先从客观地从考官的评分角度来评判下这篇文章。

首先从文章的内容上来看，考生确实从趋势角度描写了数据变化，但描写逻辑混乱。开端描述了car，local bus 及 long distance bus。Car的数据自始至终都是最大的，先描写也毋庸置疑，但local bus 和 long distance bus，变化数据设计不多，同时变化趋势也不相同，放在一起描述没有意义。其次，此文没有描述表格中的总量这一数据，这也是其失分的原因。

再来看下这篇文章数字后所带的单位，考生的作文中带的是people，但仔细审题后我们会发现，这篇作文的真正单位实际是miles，通篇文章对单位的理解都是错误的。

接下来我们来看结构，通篇文章分成两段。考官习作中有分成三段、四段及五段的小作文的例子，但两段的绝对没有。同时，文章开篇直接就描述了最大数据，缺少了开头段的引入，结尾段也并不是考官所期望看到的总结性信息。

不过从词汇角度来看，文章代词及连词使用较好。

a.However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.Its指代long distance bus ride。

b.It jumped from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. It指代the number of people who travelled by train.

c.This makes the train second popular mode of transportation. This 指代上一句话。

从语法角度来看，文章细小问题较多。

a.时态：数据变化时间为1985-2000，为一般过去，考生采用的为一般现在。

b.主谓一致：However the long distance bus rides is much more preferred by people as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years. 主语复数，谓语动词单数，主谓不一致。

c.名词单复数： There's a significant increase in the numbers of people who travelled by train. Number应为单数。

d.被动语态： as its figures are more than doubled in the last 15 years.People who chose to walk or cycle are decreased slightly in 2000.Number of people choosing different modes of travel is rapidly increased from 450 to 585 in 2000. 这三个句子的动词应该全部改为主动语态。

这样的作文究竟可以得几分呢，我们来看下考官评语，实际同我们刚刚分析时给出的关键点是一致的。

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment:

This answer does not introduce the information in the table, nor does it report it accurately. The figures are misinterpreted as representing the number of people rather than the average number of miles travelled per person per year. Consequently the information about the increase in total travel is simply not mentioned, so not all key information is covered. There is an attempt to summarize trends in the figures, but the reader cannot get a clear overall picture of the information because of the fundamental confusion.

Nevertheless, the information is organized and the writing flows quite well because of good use of referencing and other connectors, but there are occasional errors in these and the links between ideas are slightly confusing at times.

The strong feature in this answer is the range of vocabulary which is used with some flexibility and good control. A good range of structures is also used, but there are still some fairly basic mistakes, such as in the choice of tense, subject/verb agreement and inappropriate use of the passive.

当然我们分析这篇考生习作的最终目的不是想告诉大家6分的作文错误百出，于思靓老师是希望同学们可以取长补短，像这篇作文考生所出现的基本问题，如时态、单位、语态等在你的作文中要避免出现，像考官特别看重的他的句子多样性的运用要多加学习。最后期待大家能拿到理想的分数。

雅思作文禁忌

发信人: james_qsli(james)

其实早就想写关于雅思的一些文章了，看到网上那些被考试整的死去或来的战友们,我的心简直比刀割还疼，呜…呜…
废话少说,进入正题。
我上过三个雅思培训班，新东方一个，澳际两个(IELTS3和INTENSIVE，考官教课)，我的主要经验都是在澳际中获得的。先谈谈写作重应该避免的问题：
1．with the development of our modern society
要是评选雅思写作十大禁忌，她应该排名榜首了。原因很简单，中国考生常常把她列为第一句，判卷考官一看，好：“another student made in the new oriental school”，虽然可能这个人并不是新东方教的，只不过不小心看了网上的一片范文，其实这种开头在21st century这个报纸上也并不少见，但要命的是她是错误的，也就是说外国人没这么用的。
不过还好，各位战友要实在想用也不妨事，只要换一种说法，用as。如as 人民生活水平的提高，blah，blah，blah。
2．Every coin has two sides
雅思作文第二杀手，都被中国人用烂了，也用错了。在这帮考官的眼中，如果你想证明一件事，就要用你自己的语言，正确的逻辑，合适的例子来证明说服别人。
3．It is obvious that …
这句话常被中国考生用在图表作文中，被新东方的胡雅思列为例句，其实她用在这里并不合适。原因很简单，她翻译成中文就是“显而易见”，可判卷考官会说：“I don’t think it is obvious。”如果你用这句话形容图表，翻译成北京话就是：“你这傻B，这都看不出来。”那你的分数就可想而知了。
4．Phenomenon
中文译为“现象”，大家就拿来乱用，实际上她是指自然现象，而且是指不好的自然现象，如台风等。这么一看就闹笑话了，如今的中国社会被我们形容的到处是台风，好台风刮完刮坏的。
5．翻译
有的人喜欢写作时做一些翻译工作，说实在的，这不是什么好事，特别是有关政治的，举例来说，有人写到：It severely damages the Party’s image and harms the relationship between common people and officials（21世纪报合订本2001年下半年第19页）。翻译过来就是：“这破坏了党在人民心目中的形象和干群关系。”能上新闻联播的翻译。可是外国人看了会作何感想呢？
6．列表（listing）
列表实际上就是写task 1时间不够时，偷懒的一种方法，如：A 50%，B 21%，C 13%。岂不知，与其这样还不如不写。她只能证明你没有掌握基本语法的能力，有了她的出现，你的图表作文不会超过5分。