雅思作文评分标准及高分范文 新东方名师：Be和Have在雅思作文中的妙用

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文评分标准及高分范文 新东方名师：Be和Have在雅思作文中的妙用，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文评分标准及高分范文

Task Response

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。

Cambridge 8 – Test 2

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?

Has this become a positive or negative development?

原文：

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person. The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no secure communications.

Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level between two person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, has improved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhances the communication. There are many many medium which are available now such as internet, called cards etc.

The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world.

People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It has become so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives even with the unknown people.

原文翻译：

今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了变化。

是的。技术改善了人们的交流方式。以前人们总是期待找到方便的方法联系居住在异地的亲朋好友。以前没有高效的技术帮助人们沟通交流。以往的通讯系统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写一些私密的事情因为担心通信不够安全。专业的通信技术应该是安全的、准确的，但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。

现在，这些事情已经改变了，住在远处的人们利用一种高效的方式联系他们的爱人。这些方式改善了人们之间的交流方式。因为人们使用了改善交流的高科技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。

新东方名师：Be和Have在雅思作文中的妙用

“Be”动词和“have/has” 在雅思小作文中的七十二变 　　很多学生写小作文的时候喜欢带着些大作文的痕迹，比如be动词，还有have, has 经常出现。然而在小作文中，除了要客观描述，重点比较之外，还有一个经常被考生忽略的关键要求：使用图表描述语言。那么这个图表专用语言的玄机不仅仅在于上升下降和搭配幅度的必备词汇，更重要的体现在动词的灵活运用上。 　　下面我们以剑7 Test 4 的四线图为例，简单看一下对“Road”那条线的描述，很多学生会写成什么样： 　　Road was always the highest over the 28-year period, and it had a dramatic increase to almost 100 million tonnes in 2002. 　　关于这道题，大多数学生最爱犯的错误就是主语的混淆。其实增长下降的并不是这些交通工具，而是由这些交通工具分别运输的货物的数量的增减。所以其实这句话的所有主语都错了。这跟剑7 Test2 的例题一样，主语并不是chicken 或者beef，而是the consumption of chicken and beef. 下面我们再拆开来分析： 　　前半句话中Road 后面的was 其实想表达“保持”的意思，那么小作文中保持最高完全可以用kept或者是remained这个词，而不是用was这么生硬的论述。那么改成kept之后，后面的largest也可以相应换成一个生动的“most popular”, 即保持最受欢迎的交通方式，这样无论英文还是中文翻译都显得立体起来。 　　而后半句中的had 其实是不符合图形描述的基本句型的。从来没有一个句式是“主语+has/had+变化”。这里的had可以换成更地道的showed或者是witnessed. 所以这句话就可以改成：Road always kept the most popular transport among all the patterns, and it showed a dramatic increase to almost 100 million tonnes in 2002. 　　然而在饼状图中，be动词或者has/had被滥用的几率就更高了。饼状图里首要掌握的就是表示“占有”的单词，然而很多学生在写作文的时候还是下意识地“抛弃”了这些词，反而舍近求远地去选用“俗不可耐”的be动词。就拿剑8 Test1中的混合图表为例，其中的饼状图很简单，就由四个扇面组成，那我们看一下学生一般会写成什么样子： 　　Over-grazing destroys the largest proportion of land, which is 35%. And the world has 30% and 28% land being degraded by deforestation and over-cultivation. Other reasons only take 7% of the pie chart. 　　首先我们看第一句话，这句话中的前半句没有问题，只是后面的which is 就有些非主流了。这里我们可以用一个表示“占有”的词作非谓语动词，比如把后半句改成occupying 35% of the worldwide degradation. 　　在看第二句话，the world has 中的has 用得也不够地道。这里可以改成there be句型就会更顺畅：There were 30% and 28% of the global farming land being degraded by deforestation and over-cultivation respectively. 　　最后一句话，不能说完全就错了，句式是没有问题的，但是在主体段中用pie chart 做主体描述对象显然是不够理智的，除了首段用到“该pie chart显示了….”的句型外，其实在后面的文章当中，主语名词都应该用题意给出的描述对象而不是pie chart。比如这句话可以改成： Other reasons only constitute 7% of the total degraded land.

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