美国老师的雅思作文范文赏析雅思作文中最好避免的句子

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美国老师的雅思作文范文赏析雅思作文中最好避免的句子

美国老师的雅思作文范文赏析

题目：

Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of * life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

参考范文：

Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the “real world” when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties.The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident,but in fact require closer examination.

The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck ,and are thus naturally better suited to stretching money when times get tough in *hood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families,thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths,are believed to be completely ignorant of the tentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in *hood.They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief,though logical,overlooks one key point which is,of course,education.

The basis of this argument is,of course,knowing the value of money ,and the idea that children of the poor know this,and those of the wealthy do not.Who though,is in a better position to teach their children the value of money,someone skilled in earning and keeping it,the wealthy parent,or someone who can not seem to acquire it,the poor parent? Both wealthy and poor children are equally likely to acquire an education in money,whether it is formal,or in the school of hard knocks. Conversely, both children are as likely to ignore this education.

A poor child may believe that one can get along,if not as easily,without wealthy.A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management,the key to developing this skill is education.

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雅思作文中最好避免的句子

发帖：wendyyin

大概说下自己的情况.我IELTS也是考了N次,虽然最终过了,但是过得很勉强.所以决定在正式的MASTER上课前先读2个月的语言.目前已经上了2个星期的课,总体来说还是颇有些收获的.这2周内已经写了2篇IELTS作文,语言课程的老师从我们的ESSAY中挑出了一堆毛病.把错误之处一一讲解给我们.个人觉得很有用,编辑出来给大家,希望大家能够从中受益.

1. a lot of/lots of
这对词组一般不要出现在academic essay中,考官已经看烦了.可以用A considerable number of代替

2. Everything has two sides/every coin has tow sides
说了跟没说一样,明显的事实,以后也不要用了

3. Recently
这个词不好.按照他们的说法就是too imprecise,没有一个具体的时间.可以用 In the last 5 years…/since….代替

4. There is survey……
老师是这么说的:has there been?/only say this if you actually know of one 也就是说考官知道这些都是你编的,最好不要用了

5. And, because, but
这三个词我们还是经常会用到.其实最好用in addition, therefore, however等代替

6. 不能用vivid 来形容world vivid可以用来说memories或者是dream之类的

7. No one can deny that…/Undoubtedly
这2个词组太绝对了,用来开头并不合适. 其实每个人都能持与你意见相反的态度

8. in a word
很多人会用它来做conclusion. 鬼佬的意见是:如果你准备用这个词组来引出你的观点,那你最好用一个词来概括,谁让你是这么写的呢

9. Meanwhile don’t use in general academic writing or for task 2—but it is ok for describing a process in task 1

10. Nowadays
理由和3差不多, 这个词用在文章里显得太普通了, 老师的原话是it does not mean very much

11. It is a well known fact… 最好不要用, 有的考官会扣分

12. advantages and disadvantages 换成merits and drawback 和pros and cons