雅思作文修改：new 雅思作文禁忌

雅思考试主要是通过对考生听、说、读、写四个方面英语能力的考核，综合测评考生的英语沟通运用能力，实现“沟通为本”的考试理念。对于雅思考生来说，也有很多考试难点和政策盲区需要帮助解答。今天雅思无忧网小编准备了雅思作文修改：new 雅思作文禁忌，希望通过文章来解决雅思考生这方面的疑难问题，敬请关注。

雅思作文修改：new language should be invented

题目：Some people think that a new language should be invented for people from different countries to use for the international communication. To what extent do you think its advantages far outweigh its disadvantages?

其实这篇并不怪啊，就相当于我发的讲义的重点题目第一题，一种全球化的语言。

In the contemporary world, globalization is making a large incidence around the world. The issue of invented a fresh language is an emotional one, with some people talking the attitude that is necessary to contrive a new language for people from different countries to use for the international communication.

The reason for this trend may involve the recognition that different language may cause dispensable trouble, even lead to a war and also restricted people who can only use their mother tongue to communicate with external people. By contrast, those who can use foreign language to get a high-paid career and immigrate to other countries have a high quality life. They tend to be more enlighten may to they broader view. Admittedly, having ability to communicate with people who has different culture background is increasingly remarkable. So, invented a new language may bring numerous benefits to not only a person, but countries from all over the world.

第一个立论段落的问题：主题句涵盖太多内容，太宽泛，变成几乎没有主题句

However, a great language frequently link to a variety of culture. Furthermore, originate a new language is a long-term evolution like Chinese. Classical Chinese is the beginning of Chinese which is throughout 5000 years of history and gradually evolve to modern language called Modern Vernacular Chinese. During that time, Chinese shaped a colorful culture which is magnificent at present. But, current science and technology is become increasing advancing. Scientist may totally create a new language which is combine diversity of culture.

这段的论述有点离题了

Overall, despite of creating a language may during a long-term period. But, modern technology can reduce that period and eventually contrive a new language. Speaking myself, its benefits are significant contributing factors to the development of world.

给你一点论据：

支持：

1. 个人生活，学习，工作带来方便

2. 促进世界的经济发展，国与国的沟通，社会进步

不支持：

1. 造成很多小语种和少数民族文化的消失

2. 造成世界的uniformity,使人们的生活变的dull或monotonous

雅思作文禁忌

发信人: james_qsli(james)

其实早就想写关于雅思的一些文章了，看到网上那些被考试整的死去或来的战友们,我的心简直比刀割还疼，呜…呜…
废话少说,进入正题。
我上过三个雅思培训班，新东方一个，澳际两个(IELTS3和INTENSIVE，考官教课)，我的主要经验都是在澳际中获得的。先谈谈写作重应该避免的问题：
1．with the development of our modern society
要是评选雅思写作十大禁忌，她应该排名榜首了。原因很简单，中国考生常常把她列为第一句，判卷考官一看，好：“another student made in the new oriental school”，虽然可能这个人并不是新东方教的，只不过不小心看了网上的一片范文，其实这种开头在21st century这个报纸上也并不少见，但要命的是她是错误的，也就是说外国人没这么用的。
不过还好，各位战友要实在想用也不妨事，只要换一种说法，用as。如as 人民生活水平的提高，blah，blah，blah。
2．Every coin has two sides
雅思作文第二杀手，都被中国人用烂了，也用错了。在这帮考官的眼中，如果你想证明一件事，就要用你自己的语言，正确的逻辑，合适的例子来证明说服别人。
3．It is obvious that …
这句话常被中国考生用在图表作文中，被新东方的胡雅思列为例句，其实她用在这里并不合适。原因很简单，她翻译成中文就是“显而易见”，可判卷考官会说：“I don’t think it is obvious。”如果你用这句话形容图表，翻译成北京话就是：“你这傻B，这都看不出来。”那你的分数就可想而知了。
4．Phenomenon
中文译为“现象”，大家就拿来乱用，实际上她是指自然现象，而且是指不好的自然现象，如台风等。这么一看就闹笑话了，如今的中国社会被我们形容的到处是台风，好台风刮完刮坏的。
5．翻译
有的人喜欢写作时做一些翻译工作，说实在的，这不是什么好事，特别是有关政治的，举例来说，有人写到：It severely damages the Party’s image and harms the relationship between common people and officials（21世纪报合订本2001年下半年第19页）。翻译过来就是：“这破坏了党在人民心目中的形象和干群关系。”能上新闻联播的翻译。可是外国人看了会作何感想呢？
6．列表（listing）
列表实际上就是写task 1时间不够时，偷懒的一种方法，如：A 50%，B 21%，C 13%。岂不知，与其这样还不如不写。她只能证明你没有掌握基本语法的能力，有了她的出现，你的图表作文不会超过5分。

（to be continued）

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