雅思口语老师作文范文 雅思小作文

一、作文要学会积累 “读书破万卷，下笔如有神”，“巧妇难为无米之炊”古人这些总结，从正反两方面说明了“积累”在写作中的重要性。“平时靠积累，考场凭发挥”，这是考场学子的共同体会。
(一)语言方面要建立“语汇库”。语汇是文章的细胞缓哪。广义的语汇，不仅指词、短语的总汇，还包括句子、句群。建立“语汇库”途径有二：第一是阅读。平时要广泛阅读书籍、报刊，并做好读书笔记，把一些优美的词语、句子、语段摘录在特定的本子上，也可以*读书卡片上。第二是生活。平时要捕捉大众口语中鲜活的语言，并把这些语言记在随身带的小本子或卡片上，这样日积月累、集腋成裘，说话 就能出口成章，作文就会妙笔生花。
(二)要加强材料方面的积累。材料是文章的血肉。许多学生由于平时不注意积累素材，每到作文带哪芦时就去搜肠挂肚，或者胡编或者抄袭。解决这一问题的方法是积累素材。平时有条件的可带着摄像机、录音机、深入观察生活、积极参与生活，并与写生、、写日记、写观察笔记等形式，及时记录家庭生活、校园生活、社会生活中的见闻。记录时要抓住细节，把握人、事、物、景的特征。这 样，写出的文章就有血有肉。
(三)要加强思想方面的积累。观点是文章的灵魂。文章中心不明确，或立意不深刻，往往说明作者思想肤浅。因此，有必要建立“思想库”。方法有二：第一要善思。“多一份思考，多一份收获。”平时要深入思考，遇事多问问“为什么”、“是什么”、“怎么样”。这样就能透过现象看本质。还要随时把思维的“火花”、思索的结论记录下来。第二要辑录，也就是要摘录名人名言，格言警句等。 总之，作文要加强积累，建立好“语汇库”、“素材库”、“思想库”这三大写作仓库，并要定期盘点、整理、分门别类，且要不断充实、扩容。
二、写好作文先学会观察
鲁迅先生在回答文学青年“如何才能写出好文章”的问题时强调了两点：一是多看，二是多练。这里的“多看”即指多观察。这就说明：要写好文章，要掌握娴熟的文章写作手法，就要多观察，学会观察，观察是写作的必要前提和基础。 俄国小说家契诃夫就这样谆谆告诫初学者：“作家务必要把自己锻炼成一个目光敏锐永不罢休的观察家!——要把自己锻炼到观察简直成习惯，仿佛变成第二个天性。”把观察锻炼成习惯，锻炼成第二天性，这是一种很需要时间去磨练的功夫，是很有作用，很了不起的功夫。 要留心观察身边的人、事、景、物，从中猎取你作文时所需要的材料：你要对一些看似不大实则很有意义的事情产生兴趣，注意观察起因、过程和结果;你要留意校园花坛里的植物一年四季如何变化它的颜色，学会刨根问底，弄清这些变化的来龙去脉;你要走向社会，同更多的人接触，观察他们的一言一行，要思索一些东西，随时将它们汇入自己思想的长河。这就是观察的过程，观察过程中要注意以下几点：
(一)观察决不要仅蠢带仅局限于“用眼看”。广义的更有实际意义的观察是指要将人的五官全部调动起来：用耳朵去聆听，用身体去感受，更重要的是要用心、用脑去思索，这样的观察才会更加细腻、深刻。
(二)观察过程中要注意运用好“烂笔头”。俗语说得好：好记性不如烂笔头。好多同学每天看到的挺多，思索的也挺多，但是不善于随时记下来，这样就会使观察到的材料付之东去，许多有价值的东西也会白白浪费掉。
(三)观察尤其要注意持之以恒。别犯“脑热病”，三分钟的热度对与写好作文是没有益处的，你要将观察生活、思索生活贯穿于你生活的每一天，这样你才会写出妙文佳作来。 学会观察对于写好作文有着巨大的奠基和推动作用，离开了观察，你往往会感到难以下笔。愿你学会观察，不断培养，提高赞成的观察能力，在写作实践中取得得大的进步。
三、意高则文胜 立意，就是确立文章的中心和意图。那么文章在立意时要注意哪些问题呢?
(一)立意要正确 正确是文章立意的第一要义，所谓正确就是要保证文章的感情和思想观点正确，符合客观事物的本质和规律，符合我国基本政治原则，符合人的基本道德要求，能给人以积极的启发。
(二)立意要专一 “作文之事，贵于专一，专则生巧，散乃人愚。”无论多么复杂的事情，主旨不能分散。一篇文章如果既想说明这个问题，又想阐述那个观点，东拉西扯，必然立意不明确。其实，想面面俱到肯定会面面 不到位，况且一篇文章只能有一个中心，与其“贪多嚼不烂”，不如集中笔墨表现一个中心，即使是通过数件事来表现中心，也要做到紧帖中心行文，目标始终如一，着墨于材料与中心的结合点，使材料蕴涵的力量全部直指中心。
(三)立意要新颖 文章最忌随人后，人云亦云，新颖的角度是作文创新的核心。立意新颖要求跳出陈旧的框框、不按顺向思维、习惯思维或原有的心理定式进行立意构思，而是以独到的视角去审视题目中所蕴涵的另类内容，避开他人所常写，写别人所未写。即使同一写作对象，总是可以从许多角度切入，只要我们打破思维的定式，站在时代的高度，避“俗”求“异”，多角度、多侧面思考，或联想、或扩展、或类比、或逆向，发人之所未发，就能在五颜六色的天空里构筑属于你的最 美的彩虹。
(四)立意要深刻。 立意的深刻是指确立的主题不是人所共知的肤浅的道理，而要透过现象看本质，挖掘出更深层的意蕴。
(五)立意要巧妙 在习作有限的文字内，要表现较为深刻的思想，就只能一粒沙里看世界，从生活中的一斑一点、一枝一叶去再现生活的全貌，从一个点、一个片段、一个瞬间、一个现象入手，对社会、对人生进行描述和深思，即立意要大处着眼，小处落笔，角度虽小，却能小中见大，平中见奇。
四、怎样写好状物的文章 如何写好状物文章呢?请大家牢记以下五点：
(一)交代来历 文章开头用一、两句话介绍物品的历来，自然地引出下文。
(二)具体描述 通过颜色、形状把物品外形准确勾勒出来，写出特点给人以鲜明的感觉。多用一些恰当的修辞手法，展开合理的想象。赋予它情感，就会使物品活生生地跃然纸上。
(三)动静结合 先写静态的外形特点，再写它的动态。这样会增添一些情趣，写出的文章也会更加生活。
(四)说明功能 每件物品都有它独特的作用，一般来说，这类文章要在结尾处说明一下物品的作用这样会更加突出这件物品的特点。 (五)融进感情 字里行间要流露出作者对所描述的物品的喜欢、珍惜之情，这样会增强文章的感染力。
五、长话短说话缩写
读了一篇好文章，你一定很受感动吧?要是你想把这个故事简单的介绍给别人，就可以用缩写的形式。本次习作练习的是缩写，要求主要内容完整，重点突出;语言简练，缩写后文字不要超过三百字。 缩写是作文中的一种常见形式。所谓缩写，就是在不改变中心，不改变体裁，保留原文的主要内容的情况下，把一篇长文章压缩成短文章。学会缩写，能帮助我们更好的理解课文内容，培养我们的阅读能力和概括能力，进而提高语言表达能力。那么，怎样进行缩写呢?
(一)要留主干、去枝叶。在缩写课文时，我们要删减次要的人物、次要的事件，以及说明、交代等地方，留下课文的主要内容。如《小抄写员》一文中我们首先要思考：叙利奥是在什么情况下开始帮爸爸工作的，他为什么要偷偷地做，怎样做的，结果怎样，把最使你感动的地方画下来。然后把 帮爸爸抄写的事情经过写下来，而把当他被爸爸误解后是怎样想的等无关紧要的删除。
(二)要直接简化任务语言。在叙述中，我们要把直接叙述变成间接叙述，尽可能简化人物语言。这样，既使情节连贯，又使语句“简练”。
(三)要保持文章脉络清晰。缩写课文要注意保持文章主要脉络的清晰和完整，特别是故事发生的时间、地点、 人物、事件的起因、经过、结果等要素要齐全，让人读了对原文有个大概的了解。
(四)要不改变课文原意。缩写课文最要紧的是缩写后不可改变课文原意，做到内容基本保持和原文一直，不会使读者产生歧义。

雅思口语第一部分（键银缺每个问题要考虑思路，词汇，可参照王陆807口语词汇）

这部分肯定有过去稿辩时问题，请注意。

food

What food do you like?

What food don’t you like?

Which restaurant is your favorite?

Bicycle

Are bicycles popular in China or in your hometown?

Has the number of bicycle riders in China changed much in the past few years?

How old were you when you first learned to ride a bicycle?

What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of bicycles compared to cars?

Would you say bicycles are suitable for people of all ages?

Birthday

Do people in your country celebrate birthdays? How?

Do u think it is important for people to celebrate them?

How did you celebrate your last birthday?

Is the birthday more important for *s or young people

Email

Do you often write emails?

What are the advantages of writing emails?

What types of emails/letters do you write, business or personal? Which one is hard?

What’s the difference between letters and emails?

museum

What kinds of museums are popular in China?

What can people learn from these places?

Do you think that people should pay money to go to museums?

How can a museum attract people?

Party

Do you like parties?

Whose party do you like, friends’or parents’搏凯?

What is the difference between formal and informal party?

What do you wear to a party?

Do Chinese people often hold parties?

On what occasions do Chinese people have parties?

swimming

do you like swimming?

when did you learn to swim?

where do people swim?

what are the benefits of swimming?

Internet

What do you do with internet?

What are the advantages and disadvantages of internet?

Do you think that life is better with the internet?

When did you begin to use the internet?

What’s the influence of the internet on you?

Living place

Do you live in a house or a flat?

What is there on the wall?

What can you see from the windows of your home?

Park

What do people grow in park?

What are the advantages and disadvantages of parks?

What do people do in the park?

Photography

Do you like taking photos?

On what kind of situations do you take photos?

Could you tell me one of your happy experiences of taking photos?

Drawing

Do you like drawing?

What are the benefits of drawing?

What are the benefits of drawing for *s?

Art

Do you think the art is important to life?

Can you give an example of arts you learn?

What kind of art do you like?

What kind of art experience did you have when you were young?

What kind of art are you good at?

Newspaper

When did you begin to read newspaper?

What’s the difference between Chinese newspapers?

名字

学习/工作

家乡

常规问题

Music

Shopping

Sport

Film

Reading

TV

Weather

雅思口语第二部分

话题后面的数字是妙语连珠那本书中的页码。全国考题都一样。请大家注意：这些考题平均的分配在2-4天口语考试中，在各地出现时间不等。例如，可能北京周日下午出historical place, 在济南有可能周六下午出现。这个是不一定的。完全由考官决定。

大家想想汉语思路。请注意最近增加的热门话题。至于卡片后面的第三部分，请同学们参考王陆妙语连珠那本书。基本卡片都在那本书中。

Wedding

A change you would like to make to your life in the future

TV program/radio program 这个是任选其一

historical place=long journey=travel 历史古迹 183页

library=building妙语中有

an interesting lecture or speech

family member you spend most time with妙语中有

a change in your life妙语中有

advertisement you saw妙语中有

a course you want to learn=something you would like to learn (131页)

a case that you had to wait (一次等待的情况，可以说堵车)=a time that you were caught in the trffic jam

favorite song in your childhood

an activity in childhood妙语中有

good news you heard from the phone/interesting news

a gift/present you gave to others （92页）

something that is good for your health（这个可以说原来准备过的体育运动介绍, 或者找个新奇的内容来说）

a sports event you watched （看过的体育赛事282页）

An organization (一个机构214页) 非常非常重要

An important stage in life(人生的重要阶段278，232页)

a piece of interesting news you saw on TV or read on newspaper221页（认真准备）

a game in childhood（童年玩过的游戏224页,这个话题最好与toy准备成一个，这样可以省时间）

a good friend 妙语中有

a piece of advice you got from others 286页

a good cook you know(同学们要认真准备啊）
Describe a sculpture or work of art that you have seen.80页
你羡慕的家庭a family (not your own) you admire

特别场合的衣服或珠宝，非常重要，妙语中83页。

Describe an educational visit that you made when you were in school.

You should say:

where you went

who you went with

what you did there

and explain what you learned on this trip.

Describe your success.138，286页

You should say:
what it was
what it happened
how easy or difficult it was to achieve

老人
52

环境污染（一个被污染的地方）
63

商场
72

艺术品
80

衣服（特别场合的一件衣服）
83

将来想*的物品
97

喜爱的体育锻炼
114

电视节目
119

期刊杂志
122

动物
145

公园、花园
161

帮助(一次助人经历）
180

四季（favorite season)
196

信件、邮件
209

孩子
236

书籍
240

电影
243

照片(照片里不要有你）
259

名人
291

艺术品88888888
298

想学的另一门外语

一部法律

表演

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你备橘好，我是世纪雅思学生，我问我们老师，仿尘团一下是我的老师给回答的：
In present-day society, plastic containers and utensils are extensively used in big cities and the countryside alike. They are so common-place and I would hazard the guess that each one of us has seen, at one time or another, the unsightly scene of plastic bags swirling in the wind. These plastic shopping bags, chopsticks, to-go boxes and mineral-water bottles, to name but a few, when not properly disposed of, create a colossal amount of non-biodegradable refuse. Therefore, some people argue that we have embarked upon a “兄谨throw-away” era when plastic rubbish is largely dumped indiscriminately and irresponsibly (this act is often labeled “white pollution” on account of the color of plastic wastes). Personally, I wholeheartedly support their view.
There are numerous reasons for this worrisome phenomenon coming into being. To begin with, at present the bulk of people who shop and/or eat out regularly are still poorly-informed, uninformed or misinformed about the pernicious influence that non-biodegradable pollutants exert on the ecosystem, which is the main culprit in the global-scale mishandling of the plastic wastes. The chief component of such trash is polythene, which cannot decompose on landfill sites over the process of the next hundreds of years if no major scientific breakthrough comes along in polythene treatment. Thus, such trash must be dealt with collectively rather than be scattered like tumbleweeds. Secondly, the proliferation of plastic shopping bags and eating ware is largely fuelled by the surging, headlong consumeri*. Plastic containers and utensils are lighter in weight, cheaper (often free of charge) in price and water-proof in performance. These superior properties make them preferable to their paper and cloth counterparts in customers’ eyes; and as consumer satisfaction reigns supreme in contemporary society, compared with superb portability, affordability and utility, how to dispose of them is the last thing the customers are concerned about. Additionally, plastic bags, wrap and containers are also commercially feasible since they are cheaper to manufacture, ship and store. These mercenary considerations also have prompted the good old cloth or paper bags to be supplanted by plastic bags but over the phasing-out process, few stores and restaurants advocate or encourage the use of environmentally-benign disposal of plastic trash, hence the whole slew of non-biodegradable garbage and environmental hazards ensue.
Given the scale and severity of “white pollution”, we must take immediate steps to address this scourge. In the first place, we must do our utmost to enhance people’s awareness of how persistent and devastating non-biodegradable trash can be to our environment and our posterity’s. Secondly, retail stores and dining establishments should spare no effort in encouraging their customers to reuse plastic packing items. Furthermore, indiscriminate and irresponsible dumping of household garbage or personal junk should be outlawed by the legislature and heavy fines or even jail terms must be imposed on those compulsive litterbugs who fail to get their act together. Then, on the part of the biochemical researchers and technologists, scientific research must be launched here and now in pursuit of effectual ways to convert non-biodegradable refuse to biodegradable refuse. Last but not least, the government must not shirk its obligations in mobilizing scientific resources and rallying popular support in the crusade against “white pollution”. Neither should pay just lip service to relevant research and campaigns if no enough funding can be obtained otherwise. Additionally, I am convinced a customer tax levied by the government on the use of plastic bags will also help to curb this massive “white pollution”.
The havoc non-biodegradable refuse can wreak on the ecosystem is beyond our imagination. It can eventually devastate soil, water and the aquatic and terrestrial biota. We must start combating this environmental catastrophe before the ecosystem irretrievably breaks down under the reign of the minute plastic debris.

要是还有需要，请和我们世纪雅思的老师沟通吧~~

其实，雅思写链歼作的考官们也像智商为零一样，喜欢「装疯*傻」，但同时他们又好奇心爆棚，他们会在内心不断追问WHY，类似于「Why do you say so??」的这种让你不得不面对，但有时又招架不住的问题。

所以，对付考官这种生物，尤其需要大家注意两个字：逻辑——自圆其说、弊饥没有漏洞、让人信服

至于你说的越南考雅思，正好我们这边有做雅思考团的经验。

除去听力、阅读两项，越南雅思考试口语和写作的优势明显，但这也不是像很多网上的老师吹嘘的那样，随便考就6.5。这样的说法就带有引诱甚至误导的嫌疑。

我们先来看写作。

越南雅思考试写作的卷子难度和大陆雅思一致，但是有几点明显优势：

1、亚太区的卷子在题库轮换中比大陆有规律，目前还不是太有反预测的情况，所以从预测的角度来说越南雅思考试更好猜题。考试提前一点了解提醒题型和复习方向，当然会更好！

2、亚太所有地区一张卷子，也就是说在考试前有一定概率提前了解一些信息，当然这不是说越南雅思考试要做答案，用答案范文，反而分数不会太高！

但只要有这个提前了解信息的可能性，哪怕不一定是准确的，但提前复习再结合自己的想法来答题，加上越南雅思考试前老师也会及时给考团成员分析讲解任何他们问的有可能的题型，这就有了提分的可能。当然这样的优势是整个亚太区尤其东南亚地区的，不仅仅是越南。这也是为什么很多中国大陆雅思写作一直在5.5分的考生去东南亚考试的原因。

3、阅卷量的确少！以2021.12.15的考试为例，越南河内IDP整个考生人数是不到400人，而这些卷子在河内IDP改。也就是组织一定量考官改400张写作卷子。反观中国大陆那一场，整个华东区的卷子在上海中心批改。只南京一个城市三个考点就有将尽2000名雅思考生，全华东区数以万计。不同的工作量，假设考官都一样敬业和专业，越南雅思考试会改得相对仔细和公平。请注意，我这里说的是公平，也就是完整体现你的真实写作水平和评分，不压不扬，而不是一定给高分！但失误和压制现象一定会少很多！

最后来看口语。

越南雅思考试口语的当季度题库和大陆雅思一致，但是优势真的明显。这也是很多雅思考生去越南考雅思或亚太区考试的最主要原因：

1、越南河内IDP考场口语考官固定。

近两年在越南，笔者总共遇到15位雅思口语考官。其中10位是常驻专职考官，他们不但做考官，也在IDP做雅思培训。另外5位是在人多时会来零散帮忙的考官。一场考试A类的口语大体会有5-8位考官，UKVI类别一般是2-5位考官。考官们都不算太累。A类一般是人少的时候，周五下午半天、周六下午半天、周日一个上午。人最多的时候，周四下午半天，周五一天，周六下午半天，周日一天。UKVI类一般是人少的时候，周日一天。人最多的时候，周日一天，周一一天。而在这些时间段，考官还轮流上岗和休息。所以大多考官都在考试过程中比较耐心和nice。

2、考官更耐心。

越南河内IDP70%的考官是鼓励型考官，考试过程中不打断，有引导。而且他们的评分会比较认真。有一位光头耳钉中年考官和一位岁数很大的胖老太太，三部分的问题甚至会说两遍，并鼓励考生多说。

而这些鼓励型考官的给分普遍好于中国大陆。常见的是5-6，5.5-6.5，5.5-7，4.5-5.5，高的有6－8.5的提升。这些都是真实数据和占据千名考生中75%的数据。有些多次带学生到越南考雅思的老师看到考官是谁的时候，能根据学生的临场答题能预测出分数了。

30%是挑剔型考官，不好的考官哪里都有。越南河内IDP的挑剔型考官的特点是：全程比较严肃，不苟言笑。（当然也有和考生聊得很开心的时候，这就因考生而异，因水平而异。）对于啰嗦和语言表达能力不强的同学会打断。另外给分不如鼓励型考官。但我们从两年的数据来看，这种考官给的一般是考生一贯水平的分数，比如在大陆一直5-5.5的口语考生，在这几个考官手上的得分也是5.5左右。

所以不是每个人去越南考口语就一定提升分数。租唤返在大陆口语一直是5分以下的同学，哪里考都不占优势。但是在亚太区和越南，这样的同学遇到鼓励型考官，有到5.5的纪录。

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用词多样化我是赞成的，但是堆砌辞藻肯定不算是好文章。词语用准了可以提高文章，用得不准反而会贻笑大方。我觉得用词需要加强，这里需要的是一点一滴的长期努力。有些很细致的用词和表达是需要细微感觉的，你能体会出多少算多少吧。

原文：It is generally believed that the subjects and course contents of students should be decided by official institution such like local governments.

第一句的抄袭痕迹过重，借用了题目第一句的表达结构和用词细节，鉴于第二句和后文所显示的语言能力，我觉得你自己语言再表述的实力没有发挥出来。

个人认为，比如the subjects and course contents显然就是考你curriculum这个词，在首句就进行替换应该有助于提高首句质量。

Generally believed 一般要用在有主流共识的情况。因为后边你说业界的观点并不统一，还达没到generally的程度，这里用widely believed比 generally believed 更咐铅合适。

“institution” 要加s

students 主要指中小学阶段，题目用的children,所以建议加个”young”。通常，第一句最好指代更清楚，后文才可以省略简化。

改写:It is widely believed that the curriculum for young students should be decided by education departments.

原文：However, whether teachers should be given authority to make a decision about the curriculum for young students is a challenging issue in education.

感觉语言不够精炼，实际表达的信息并不多。这不是个“挑战性”的问题，是个“有争议”的问题。”challenging issue”改为“controversial issue”

改写:However, whether teachers should be given more authority to make such decisions is a controversial issue.

原文：棚简孝In my opinion, when designing the educational policy on curriculum, authorities should take the suggestions from teachers into account at the meantime.

“the educational policy on curriculum”太累赘了，好像没有这么用的。建议改成“educational policy or curriculum”或单链稿用“curriculum”。

还有一个是用词似似而非的问题。Take suggestion通常是在有建议的情况下被动使用。问题和前文中并没有说老师们已经提出了不同意见, 所以这里最好用“征询”意见而不该用“采纳”意见。用词最好是主动的invite suggestions,而不是take suggestions。另外，仅仅suggestions可能方式太局限，不如用inputs。

At the meantime 在这里纯属画蛇添足。At the meantime不知是否地道，通常用 in the meantime。但是放在这里也还是不合适。meantime一般是指代个某事发生前的临时时段。使用In the meantime 要让读者理解你所指代的时间段的起止，而这里没有明确meantime的起止时间或事件，属用词不当。

改写：In my opinion, when designing curriculum, authorities should invite inputs from teachers.

原文：In the first place, curriculum designed by authorities should be given priority.

严格地说，“大纲“应当被“遵从”，只有“大纲内容“可以被”优先“。“given priority”用在这里和前面不太搭配。给你举个例子体会一下吧：curriculum content should be given priority。因为本文讨论的不是扩展内容，这里建议将“given priority”改为“adhered to“，“followed”或”respected”。以上三个词从最严格到最不严格排序，根据你比较骑墙的观点可能你会选最后一个。

改写：In the first place, curriculum designed by authorities should be respected.

原文：Before carrying out the educational policy, lots of research and investigations must have been done by official institutions.

还是用词不当问题。“Carry out“ 是 implementation/execution的意思，与后文不搭配。根据后文的论述，这里用的意思应该是教育政策的”制定“或”颁布“而非“执行“。所以应该把carry out替换为formulate或make或publish。

“The”应改为“an”， 这里应是泛指的政策。

还有一点，这个句子用词太口语化了，文风不够学术。“lots of“这个短语是比较口语化的，严肃的学术写作文体最好使用更正式的词语表达建议改为”extensive”。另外如果改写得狠一点，”Before publishing“,” “done”等处也可以使用更加学术化的表达。

改写：Prior to the publication of any educational policy, extensive research and investigations must have been conducted by official institutions.

原文：This means those educational plans widely satisfy the demand of student's intellectual development and employment in the future.

至少要加入”needs”，future位置可调。

改写：This means those educational plans widely satisfy the demand of student's intellectual development and future employment needs.

原文：Another advantage is that uniform curriculum made by official institutions can contribute to unify and regulate the unitive educational system，avoiding the irregular standards of native schooling.

加入“a”。unify 和 unitive 显得用词重复。“irregular“改为“inconsistent” ， “native” 要改为”national”。

改写：Another advantage is that a uniform curriculum made by official institutions can contribute to unify the educational system, avoiding the inconsistent school standards nationwide.

原文：However, almost governments concerns more about the requirements of student's development from the social view rather than the interests of the youths.

“Almost” 改为 “most”, “concerns”去掉s, “social view” 可改”expectations from the society”，其他可酌情修改。后文你正确使用的“cater to”不妨放这里使用。

改写：However, most governments concern more about the education outcomes meeting general expectations from the society rather than cater to the interests of the individual youths.

原文：It's hard to avoid that students lose enthusia* on study toward some boring theoretical classes.

原文的表达不自然。有多种改法比如：“lost enthusia* for school” 或 “lost interest on some classes”

改写：It’s hard to avoid that some students lost interests on some theory study classes.

原文：On the contrary, teacher's abundant teaching experiences can remedy the defect of the educational policy made by authorities.

说官员的政策有“defects”似乎又是用词不妥。你又不是反对党，也不是在写攻击政策的文章，用“Defect”这个词似乎太重了，不如用”deficiency” 。

“On the contrary“用在这里其实是不恰当的。想想教师的教学经验可以弥补官员教育政策的不足这个观点与什么观点是相对呢？难道是教学经验无用论？前边两句已经用过however 转折了，这里contrary 的对象指代不清。

改写：In this regard, the rich teaching experiences a frontline teacher has can supplement the deficiencies of the curriculum made by the authorities.

原文：Teachers spent their working hours with students together so that teachers understand the student's requirements better than official institutions.

Spent改spend，student’s 改 students’, 第二个“teacher”可以改”they”以避免重复， “institutions”要去掉。学生的需求一般用needs而不用requirements.

改写：Teachers spend longer hours with students, so that they understand students’ needs better than officials.

原文：Also, the subjects and course contents designed by teachers cater to the needs of student's interests better.

“the needs of studnets’ interests” 不是地道的英文,太拗口了。是去掉“the needs of”还是去掉“ interest”二选一吧。考虑上句用了 “needs”, 这句建议保留”interest”

改写：Also, the subjects and course contents designed by teachers cater to student’s interests better.

原文：In addition, it is necessary that let teachers participate in the process of designing the subjects and courses for students since the significant position of education the teachers play.

基本修改的话“that” 改 “to”. “position” 改 “roles”，”position”指代比较”role”更具体， 第二个“of” 改“in”, “the”改 “that”。前半句改得精炼点，后半句改得通顺点，自己体会吧。
改写：In addition, it is necessary to involve teachers in the curriculum development process, recognising the significant roles that teachers play in education.

原文：In conclusion, the subjects and course contents for children should be decided by authorities , such as the central government. However, we can not neglect the disadvantages that the authorities have. And teachers' participation can remedy the defect to some extent. In other words, during the process of drafting the educational policy on curriculum, authorities should take the suggestions from teachers into account .

整段来吧，不解释了。

改写：In conclusion, school curriculum should primarily be decided by the education department at national level. However, in light of the disadvantages such arrangements may have, authorities should value teachers’ participation through out the curriculum drafting process and allow for flexibilities in local teaching practice.