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此处goods may be transported不是同慧模灶位语从句，而是修饰先行词distances的定语从句。两种从句的区别在于前扮：定语从句是修饰作用，同位语从句是解释码散说明作用。

当先行词是 way,distance,direction 等词，后面的定语从句中常用 that 来代替 in(或其他介词） +which，when，或 where，通常这个that还可以省去。例如：The way (that) he looks at problems is unique.

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第一段第四行中than后面宜加介词at或者in，因为这儿是＂对于孩子们来说在小学比在中学学一门外语要好一些。＂

建羡扒蔽议第二段最后一句话前加上Besides，此冲使其和前一句接得紧凑一些。

第三段第六行中tongue 一词拼错。As long as 改为Once （一旦）。第七行grammar 作语法兄州讲时是不可数名词，应该去掉s。native languages前加their或者the。

时间关系，仅提以上几点不成熟的意见，抱歉！

The (graph 是曲线图，应该是表table才对) gives information about the consumer durables owned in the UK over the period from 1972 to 1983.

As can be seen from the table, the greatest increase (可以考虑加上during this period)was found in telephone ownership, rising from 42% in 1972 to 77% in1983. Next came central heating ownership, which rose considerably by 27%, form37% in 1972 to 64% in 1983. The percentage of households with a refrigerator grew 21% during the same period and of those with a washing machine by 14%. In addition, households with vacuum-cleaners, televisions and dishwashers increased by 8%, 5% and 2% respectively.In the year of 1983 their introduction,television ownership stayed in top position in terms of households with, which is about 20 times larger than (telephone错了，应该是 dishwasher 才对哦!) ownership. It is also interesting to notice that 18% of households had a video recorder in 1983. (Of course the reason was because they were the new invention of that time! 这句是的替你加上的，你不须一定要接受。)
(Another new invention was the dishwasher, their figures only started to show from the year 1978，also because they are kind of luxury, too expensive and no really a nessesity. Therefore they showed a very slow increase from 3% to only 5% in five years 这是的替你补充的，同样是，你可以加或不加上去都任随你。)

In conclusion, there were striking differences in percentage of households with in(within 是一个字) the 11 years spanning from 1972 through 1983.

原文写得甚好，只有一个明显的错处(把 telephone 当庆备作 dishwasher)。悔没
另外，我替你加长了碧差纳一些以供参考，你可以接受或不接受都由你。
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